What lies before me?
A shell of former hope.
what was once a thriving entity,
now lay beneath me;
battered and broke.
Along with pain comes inspiration,
but inspiration can be done without.
The delusion of constant warmth and admiration;
two souls as one with no complication,
I've begun to doubt.
The righteous path,
is the one less traveled,
when leading to my heart.
these paths ,
it seems,
my hopes and dreams,
have been savagely torn apart.
My state of being has no name.
My soul has lost expression.
My inner glow has lost its luster;
my delight befalls depression.
I yearn to awaken from this dream,
I beg and plead with my mind;
seize me from this wicked nightmare,
and leave the hurt behind.
But liberation fails;
I am wide awake,
swimming through a river of salty tears;
the wounds still fresh,
the salt,
it stings.
How much more can a person take?
2006-09-01 08:32:31 · 6 answers · asked by ladyjno7 4 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
The theme is very good and the words too...
Felt like there is a break in the flow... from elegant to simple it changes... See if u can revisit it...
Fishie
2006-09-01 08:48:30 · answer #1 · answered by Fishie 5 · 1⤊ 1⤋
It's a masterpiece sweethart!! Keep up the good word! I love it!!!
2006-09-01 16:45:18 · answer #2 · answered by mamacita 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Seems your inner soul needs replenishing...
Not bad...You are a very deep thinker...
2006-09-01 15:43:09 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
It makes me want to cry -- it's beautiful. Hope you don't feel that way right now.
2006-09-01 15:41:38 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
this is a very beautiful poem. I really liked this alot. You are very talented.
2006-09-01 15:40:24 · answer #5 · answered by uchaboo 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
i like it
2006-09-01 15:37:50 · answer #6 · answered by Tigers Gal! 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋