At the end of time and space
Words, events and fateful place
Listen to the sound of ending
Transitions merge with final mending
About this time i'll see you there
For wisdom feared you must prepare
At final rest our souls will be
Eternal minds both you and me
2006-09-01 02:14:22 · 26 answers · asked by Anonymous in Education & Reference ➔ Words & Wordplay
its ight
2006-09-01 02:15:42 · answer #1 · answered by ♥Eryn aka Miami♥ 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's a good poem and sometimes being short has its own benefits. I like the rhyming because to me that always seems to help keep a poem together. It flows nicely and has a good message. I think the part that sticks out to me the most is the last two lines. You are also able to clearly articulate your thoughts and you start off and finish the poem quite nicely. Good Job!!
2006-09-01 02:24:41 · answer #2 · answered by stringbean 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's pretty good man. The rhyming doesn't seem forced, which is my #1 lyrical pet peeve.
You seem to deal with transient vague concepts like me. Feel free to check out my latest question, it's a lyrical challenge :)
2006-09-01 03:34:50 · answer #3 · answered by kenny_the_bomb 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Brilliant.
2006-09-01 02:20:47 · answer #4 · answered by Cas 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
bust out a shovel I dig it. It's similar to the stuff I write. I'm too much of a wuss to ever put it out there but kudos to you. Ignore the bad comments. Theyre just H8RS.
2006-09-01 02:22:26 · answer #5 · answered by Jenae, TV (tempter of the vile) 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I love it! The ideas are compact and imaginative... Plus it's got rhythm and rhyme. Good job!
2006-09-01 02:22:01 · answer #6 · answered by Miss M ♥ 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's sort of cool but a little short for me. I think you could add on to it but it's good. It's one of those short and "sweet" ones.
2006-09-01 02:16:58 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Lovely! write one for me.talented!nice.
2006-09-01 02:21:00 · answer #8 · answered by ariel 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I don't like poetry. It's okay, as far as poems go.
2006-09-04 13:11:47 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Frankly, it's mediocre. Well, you asked. But all those other folks liked it, so my opinion isn't important, is it?
2006-09-02 04:03:40 · answer #10 · answered by keepsondancing 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's Shist!
2006-09-01 02:26:27 · answer #11 · answered by ••Mott•• 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋