They was a girl who I know
She was me but I don’t know
How she survived
But she can tell you so sit and be quiet
Once upon a time on this earth she was
A beautiful girl with the loveliest lips
Her lips were soft and big so wide
Never mind leave me from her smile
She lives in Australia but she was half Lebanese and half Spanish
It is more complicated so listen up nice
Keep in mind she had a wonder smile
She moved to Dubai a couple years later
She had a lot friends and she partied all the time
But she end up drunk with a fine young man
Who slept with her when she got really drunk
Next day she found she slept with that sicko
And she was very sad
Told to her friend but it wasn’t a surprise because they knew bout that
So she cried out loud and said how could you do that?
But she had a soft heart that she forgave them all
But her other friend they thought her decision was bad
Next on that
She met a nice guy
His name was Moe and he was a glow to her mind
They became very close as friends
That she decided to tell him that
She never slept at night since she was 9
She waits the sun to rise up high
Then she thinks it's safe to lie down
In her motto car bed
He said it's so bad that she has to get over it
But he doesn’t know how
She told him it's alright don’t worry i am ok get over I stay like that
He knew a lot about her since that night cause they opened the subject of the
What craziest thing have you done in your life?
She told him her life was a weird one
He knew a lot bout her at that time
That she was an lesbian but not at the time
He knew she kissed a girl and drunk coffee at the window at night with people staring at her all the time
And he knew she went down with her panty at night because her boyfriend wanted her so bad so she didn’t have time to dress up
No one liked it when she smoked so bad and drunk so much
Everyone asked her to quiet but she said it's her life
After a while like a month or two her best friend found some doctor result in her file written on it "found cure for your dease" but she didn’t know what she had
She went and asked her what she had
She told her I have cancer but tell no one bout this rank
She said sorry but they knew your sick but they don’t know with what
They asked but she cried and said it's very hard so they gave her comfort and said it's alright
But they knew it's very bad so they all loved her so much and supported her and her life
I guess this is it now you know how to react everyday
Live your day as its going to be the last
So do like me- and do all these crazy stuff before you cry about wasting your life because life is like an ice cream. Enjoy it before it melts! _
2006-08-31 18:10:50 · 7 answers · asked by Anonymous in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
It shows great talent,but its a short story..try putting it in that slot.keep up the good work.
2006-08-31 18:14:03 · answer #1 · answered by ? 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Eh. Its too long for your average reader, and I don;t like the flow. Thats just a personal opinion tho. Keep writing, learn to spell, and you'll get good.
Respect to fellow writers.
2006-08-31 18:14:39 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
nice, 10 times better than me
2006-08-31 18:15:51 · answer #3 · answered by VOOL 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Yes it is a nice poem! God Bless!
2006-08-31 18:13:52 · answer #4 · answered by stormy2u2001 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
it was way too long, i got bored. try to write a poem not a peom. and make it shorter.
2006-08-31 18:14:30 · answer #5 · answered by bluestarbunny 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
not bad
i like it
2006-08-31 18:16:01 · answer #6 · answered by fuzzycakes 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
very nice story you've got there...
2006-08-31 18:12:57 · answer #7 · answered by Jubei 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋