Please rate 1-5, with an explanation, thanks! ( i know it won't be wonderful b/c im only in middle school but suggestions would be nice!)
2006-08-31 14:17:15 · 17 answers · asked by Anonymous in Education & Reference ➔ Homework Help
sorry! i actually 4got the most important part!
“You call it madness, but I call it love.” Sound familiar? As a middle school student, this example is seen often. Guys and girls will go far just to impress each other.
2006-08-31 14:24:26 · update #1
Where is it?
2006-08-31 14:22:10 · answer #1 · answered by Wise Old man 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
happy to help when there is something to help .... did the dog eat your homework??
Okay, now that you have published.... a 2. We need a follow up explanation of the opening sentence. either tell us who is disagreeing or tell us why "I call it love". Also "guys and girls" doesn't flow. boys and girls, men and women, the sexes, ....
I'm sure you will do well and I applaud your courage at letting other people comment on your work. Good for you!
2006-08-31 14:26:13 · answer #2 · answered by lollipop 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
where is it?
ok. ummm. using a quote is always good. and the question makes the reader want to continue reading but where is ur opinion and three reasons?i'll give u a 2.5 cause ur missing the most i'm portant stuff!!! but u had some good things. so jus add ur opinion and three reasons and ur a good 5.5 or 6. am also in middle school. 8th grade. hope i helped!!! :)
2006-08-31 14:22:17 · answer #3 · answered by Procrastination Kills. 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
All that is true,but you forget the constant assault on your senses
the raging hormones,the constant worry,am I pretty enough?
why does this music that everyone else loves sound
like crappy noise.Why are they looking at me,are they looking?
Relax,don`t worry,it gets worse.
I`ll give you a strong 3.
2006-08-31 14:54:14 · answer #4 · answered by Rich B 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
okay i think that its a very good paragraph so far. its cute and catchy. but theres a problem. its doesnt quite seem long enough to be considered a paragraph..
so for qualitly- 8
for quantity- 3.5
keep going with your theme and see where it gets you. it sound sgood so far.
2006-08-31 14:25:19 · answer #5 · answered by iheartshiny_things 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Were is your paragraph...Im in 8th grade and wrote three intros today.. I would be happy to help u
2006-08-31 14:22:58 · answer #6 · answered by Mike R 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
if this is your intro i rate it a 3. you need a comma after school
2006-08-31 14:24:49 · answer #7 · answered by General 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
id giv it about a 2.5-3..quotes r good but dont ask questions
2006-08-31 14:30:44 · answer #8 · answered by colombianqt2112 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i like you avatar you paragraph not so sure where it is
2006-08-31 14:23:23 · answer #9 · answered by <3 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Where is the paragraph??
2006-08-31 14:22:20 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
i'd love to rate it but WHERE IS IT?
2006-08-31 14:23:35 · answer #11 · answered by nades 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋