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Question

I'm a Chinese and the teacher told us to write a english diary, so I'm wondering can you plzzzzzzzzzzzz help me? use your way of writing my diary or check if is there any grammar , spelling , phrase that is wrong! I can give you 10 points if u did a good job!(you can change or add many dificult or funny words in my diary, make my diary more interesting)

Dear Diary,
This is my second day of junior high school. I am so busy and tired, so at night I called my two best friends Alex and Alicia. Alicia told me that her school was beautiful, and she had made a lot of friends today. But she said that her science teacher was the most boring teacher that she has ever met. I told her our science teacher was quite humorous and funny, she seems to be a little jealous about that. Then we talked about the movie "Stormbreaker" is going to come out soon, so she asked me if she could take me to the movies and I said yes. After I hung up the phone I called my best friend Alex, I asked him if he could go to the movies with us and he said "sure!" We had chated a lot, he said he bullied some students in his class. I asked him why did he do that and he said"they were ugly!" And then we both laughed. We shared a lot about our schools and how busy we are.

I told him our classmates boys and girls got into fights today, but our teacher set classroom rules for all of us, so I think tomorrow will be better.

I told him our classmates boys and girls got into fights today, but our teacher set classroom rules for all of us, so I think tomorrow will be better.

Answer 1

This is my second day of junior high school. I am so busy and tired, so at night I decided called my two best friends Alex and Alicia. Alicia told me that her school was beautiful, and she had made a lot of friends today. But she said that her science teacher was the most boring teacher that she has ever met and she hated him because all he did was shout and pick his nose. I told her our science teacher was quite humorous and funny because his pants were too short and you could see his white sock that had bart simpson on, she seems to be a little jealous about that because she likes bart simpson. Then we talked about the movie "Stormbreaker" which is going to come out soon, so she asked me if she could take me to the movies and I said yes, i think deep down inside she fancies me but she won't say anything i think she thinks this is our first date, i will have to play it cool. After I hung up the phone I called my best friend Alex, I asked him if he could go to the movies with us and he said "sure!" i knew then that if we all got together and Alicia fancied me we could have a threesome. We had chated a lot, he said he bullied some students in his class . I asked him why did he do that and he said"they were ugly!" and wouldn't sleep with him. And then we both laughed because if he asked me i would sleep with him i like alex. We shared a lot about our schools and how busy we are. When we went to the cinema i realised that the film we really wanted to see was booked up so we watched Bambi instead, oh how i cried i wished alex would just hold and cuddle me but he was crying too.............oh my darling alex xxxxx

Answer 2

I only found one spelling error. The tense jumped around a bit, but it should be pretty consistent now.

Dear Diary,
Today is my second day of junior high school. I am so busy and tired, so last night I called my two best friends Alex and Alicia.
Alicia told me that her school is beautiful and she had made a lot of friends, but that her science teacher is the most boring teacher that she has ever met. I told her our science teacher is quite funny. She seemed to be a little jealous about that.
Then we talked about the movie 'Stormbreaker'. She asked if I would like to see it with her when it comes out, and I agreed.
After I hung up the phone I called my best friend Alex. I asked him if he could go to the movies with us and he said "Sure!" We chatted a lot. He said he bullied some students in his class. I asked him why he did that and he said "They were ugly!" We both laughed. We spoke a lot about our schools and how busy we are.
I told him that some members of my class got into fights today, but our teacher set classroom rules for all of us, so I think tomorrow will be better.

Answer 3

Dear Diary,
This is my second day of junior high school. I am so busy and tired, so later tonight, I called my two best friends Alex and Alicia. Alicia told me that her new school was beautiful, and she had made a lot of friends today. She said that her science teacher was the most boring teacher that she has ever met. I told her our science teacher was quite humorous and funny, she seems to be a little jealous about that. Then we talked about the movie, "Stormbreaker". It is going to come out soon, so she asked me if she could take me to the movies, and I said "yes". After I hung up the phone I called my best friend Alex, I asked him if he could and would go to the movies with us and he said "sure!" We had chatted a lot, he said, he bullied some students in his class. I asked him why did he do that and he said "they were ugly!". Then we both laughed. We shared a lot about our schools and how busy we are. I told him the boys and girls in my class got into many fights today, but our teacher set classroom rules for all of us, so I think tomorrow will be better.

~and then about at the bottom u should write your name> _______________________

Answer 4

your english is not as worst as i thought. anyway here's my edited version (i didnt change your content)
Dear Diary,
Today's the second day of junior high school. I was so busy and tired the whole day but I missed my two best friends Alex and Alicia so I called them at night. Alicia told me that her school was beautiful, and she had made a lot of friends today. But she said that her science teacher was the most boring teacher she had ever met. I told her our science teacher was quite humorous but she seemed to be a little jealous about that. Then we talked about the movie "Stormbreaker" that is going to come out soon, so she asked me if she could take me to the movies and I said yes. After I hung up the phone, I called my best friend Alex and asked him if he could go to the movies with us. He said "Sure!" We chatted a lot. He mentioned that he bullied some students in his class. I asked him why he did that and he exclaimed that they were ugly. We both laughed. After that, we continued to share stuff happening at our schools and how busy we were.


I told him our classmates, both boys and girls, got into fights today, so our teacher set classroom rules for all of us. I guess tomorrow will be better.

Answer 5

Windows Word... Spell check and grammer check.. as part of the program.. Sounds like you have a good grip on what you are doing.

Answer 6

Huh. Well it sounds pretty good, but your friend Alex is a jerk and I'd so kick his *** if he was my friend and he did that.