ENGLISH TEACHERS..HELP....GOD BLESs... I NEED A TITLE!?

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English teachers can you edit this? i can't find anyone to edit this for me? God bless...?
The Puritans contained a strict and tolerant philosophy. Their well-established philosophy strongly focused on God. Serving God existed as their first responsibility. They considered the Bible as the true law of God that provided guidelines for church government. They constantly kept God and the Devil in mind. Puritans viewed witchcraft as evidence of a person’s spiritual weakness. The Puritan philosophy existed as an enemy toward witchcraft. They condemned anyone who practiced witchcraft.
Furthermore, the Puritan had an extremely strict philosophy. For example, they were killed for celebrating Christmas or even dancing with the opposite sex. Men and women did not have equal rights. By the time, a child reached age 7; he or she held responsibilities for their actions. Even though they maintained strict laws, some of their positive laws benefited women. For example, men could not abuse or speak sharply to their wives. Some of their poems express their philosophies.
Anne Bradstreet (1612-1672) existed as the first American poet and writer to have their work published. Bradstreet was well educated for her time. This allowed her to express herself through poetry. Bradstreet strongly based her poems on religious themes and philosophies. She wrote personal poems about her thoughts of childbirth and the death of a grandchild.
Anne Bradstreet’s poems highly reflect the Puritan philosophy. In her poem, “Here Follow Some Verses on the Burning of Our House, July 10, 1666,” Anne shows her belief in God even though her house is on fire. Passages like “…to my God my heart did cry to strengthen me in my distress and not to leave me succorless” show the reader that even though she dealt with pain at that particular time in her life she still looked to God for help. Puritans prayed and read the Bible daily.

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19 minutes ago
NEEDED:

TO REMOVE DEAD WORDS
STRENGTH SOME WORDS
AND MORE IDEAS


I REALLY NEED A TITLE I 'VE BEEN THINKING FOR AGES AND CAN'T COME UP WITH ONE


CAN I SEND IT TO YOU TO READ IT BETTER?

8 minutes ago
OK THIS IS FOR ENGLISH... THE QUESTION WAS HOW IS PURITAN PHILOSOPHY EVEDENT IN BRADEWAYS' POEM? and we had to explain the other stuff........

I JUST NEED HELP GETTING RID OF THE DEAD WORDS AND COMING UP WITH A TITLE

Answer 1

use more examples.
also, you tend to write in short sentences; try to limit the amount of pauses you have in the paper; it makes it hard to read. (see what i mean?)
but really, your paper is fine for a high school level. However, using a thesaurus to replace common words with unique words will really add to your grade; it makes you stand out from all the other boring papers!
you also need a conclusion (ending) to your paper. A good way to do this is to tie in your thoughts with the first paragraph and your thesis (main idea.)
find a quote that you think will set a proper mood for your paper and add it to the top of the essay above your title. doing this will definitely get you brownie points, believe me.
as for a title, well... make it simple. what is your first thought when you read your paper?

Answer 2

Excellent.

Answer 3

reword the question for your title. Your paper i want 2 rewrite the whole thing!!!

Answer 4

send it to me and i will be glad to edit it for you and to help you with a title

okay i tried to send you an email and i also sent you a im message, if you want me to edit this for you please respond today!

Answer 5

Just ask YOUR english teacher.

Answer 6

wonderful paper

"The Puritians Lifestyle" is what I would title it.

Answer 7

If I'm not mistaken, this would be considered cheating.

Mack

Answer 8

I WASN'T GOOD IN ENGLISH CLASS SO I DON'T KNOW;;;;;;