Proofread And Edit...Please don't change Rhymes...Ty?

Question

There was once a day Buffalo was small,
Smaller than today, some can recall,
The air the same, the sun was as is now,
The workers on the courthouse, Had sweat on their brow,
The horses did trot, the wagons were fast,
At now some regret, The things of the past,
The schoolhouse still sits, In this town today,
We live in town, where history does stay,
The hotel in now, the top of O'Bannon Bank,
To us the old memories, Of Buffalo does thank,
For we still do grow, and go many ways,
Just like back then, In Buffalo's Dwindling days.

Answer 1

There was a day
Buffalo was small,
Smaller than today
and some can recall,
there go can figure that out can't you.

Answer 2

There once was a day Buffalo was small,
Smaller than today (some can recall).
The air was the same, the sun hot as now,
The courthouse workers had sweat on their brows,
The horses trotted, the wagons went fast...
Now some regret these things of the past:
The schoolhouse that sits in this town today
Where we live -- where history stays.
The hotel we're in now, at the top of the O'Bannon Bank,
The old memories Buffalo does thank,
For we still grow, and go many ways,
Just like back in Buffalo's Dwindling days.

[This is very difficult because I have no idea what this is about and it's very difficult to understand what you are saying, some of your verse is very awkward. Try for natural rhymes .. they sound forced. remember to let your poetry dictate the rhyme, not the other way around.]

Answer 3

I think your theme is a good one, but it's tricky editing someone else's poetry. Prosaic writing (non-poetry) is easier, but poetry is so personal, and the rules are slightly different. I would mostly check it for its "meter" or "scan' --there should be a nice rhythm to it when you read it back.