Taday I gave my life away
You took it with open arms
I ran out of time on this earth of ours
I was no longer strong
You broke me down and made me weak
You took my voice so I could not speak
I kept so silent I could not weep
but only in my dreams,
No one would listen no one would help
Nomatter how much I would scream and shout
Thats why I took another way out
By giving my life away,
2006-08-29 01:12:44 · 11 answers · asked by Argent 4 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
That is awesome! i love your poem alot...get it published! Wonderful work! Id give u an A+ .
2006-08-29 01:16:38 · answer #1 · answered by ♥mcmanda♥ 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it. A good place to get poetry published is in Beginnings Magazine (or at leat it used to be -- if it is still around).
2006-08-29 08:23:20 · answer #2 · answered by JCS 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Not bad. Just fix the punctuation and spelling (today, not taday) and submit it to: http://www.poetry.com/
Good luck!
2006-08-29 08:21:06 · answer #3 · answered by hellzbellz 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Your poem reminds me of a friend of mine - she writes this way, too. I think it's very interesting. Keep Writing!!!
2006-08-29 09:46:07 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's good. Keep working on it. Dont listen to those other *** holes that say you're stupid and should have died. They're just jealous.
2006-08-29 09:09:30 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
gud try,bt there shud be a fixed rhym scheme.try another one,and best of luck
2006-08-29 08:22:34 · answer #6 · answered by sweetu 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
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what the hell was that?
do u call it a poem?
2006-08-29 08:18:42 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
it was alright, i think i read others you wrote, they were better. but not bad kid you got talent.
2006-08-29 08:23:06 · answer #8 · answered by Willie H 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Not bad.
2006-08-29 10:04:56 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
lmao @ mrpoopoo
keep at it kid
2006-08-29 08:18:45 · answer #10 · answered by da1U<32haT3 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋