first song I wrote?

Question

This was the first song I wrote. I was 12 when I wrote it. It's about the girls who used to be mean to me.

I wear Converse, they wear flip flops
I paint my nails white, they paint their's pink,
I sing songs, and they listen to ipods,
And they laugh at me
So I'm baby that's what you say
You try to being mocked every day.

I feel dumb
and
I feel like an idiot
Tears rolled down my cheeks
As I cried in misery

It was a silent moment,
during the cover of night
I looked up to the roaring
sky,
The wind blew my hair as I walked
by.
The clouds were dark full of rain,
I listened, hoping someone up there would see my pain.....

I feel dumb
I feel like an idiot
Tears rolled down my cheeks
As I cried in misery

I stood on the hill,
while the rain pelted down,
my long brown hair stuck to my face
I looked around in despair
and suddenly a thought came to me.....

I used to feel dumb,
and
I used to feel like an idiot
but then I realized....

This is who I am
This is me!
Why should I be
ashamed of who
I wanna be?

I wear Converse,
they wear flip flops
I paint my nails white, they like pink
When they laugh, I just say,
”Good -for -you -cause -I -don't care
This is me!”
echo
me
me
me

Really? You would buy it? :o I'm trying to think of a melody.

Answer 1

I am a songwriter/musician, and for a first song that isn't bad at all. It has a more poetic side to it, but I can still feel the song inside of it. If I were you I would get an acoustic guitar for $100 dollars, you can get a whole starter pack for that. You should also get a tascam MF-P01- 4 track cassette recorder so you can record the songs you write. www.musiciansfriend.com or your local music shop.....or Guitar Center.

Answer 2

I basically got sick of it by the 2nd verse, but can't expect much from a time when your songwriting ability may not have been as refined as it maybe now, so kudos for the effort, keep at it and you can only get better!

Answer 3

Oh, that is sooo pretty, I used to write songs too, but now I write poetry. Keep it up, it helps you express yourself and grow as a person.

Answer 4

It is very touching. I hope you feel better now.

Answer 5

Not Bad!

Answer 6

That's really good. If it was released id buy it ^^