ten points to whoever helps me most! and an extra 2 to everyone who answers!!!!!?

Question

whatcha think of my song???????????


In doubt

sometimes I feel
like My life’s a wonder
And sometimes I feel
Like I’m ten feet under

(bridge)
Right now I feel confused, depressed and hurt
Like what is this worth?

(chorus)
When you broke my heart
What was that about
Trying to be myself
And now my heart’s in doubt, yeah, yeah

When I walk out the door in the morning-time
I think about how you broke my heart
Right down the middle, in half
I knew it was done from the start

(sings softly to guitar)i can do anything without u bay bay (x2)

(repeat bridge)

(repeat chorus x2)

thats it i hope ya like it!!!!!

yah its about me and a friend,

Alright, so I used to be crazy about the guy named Zach... Absolutely crazy about him. I was in love with him (still am in the back of my mind but he can't know that). Problem is, Zach has a best friend, who hates me. She used to be like my best friend. I introduced them, you know? There is another problem though. I've liked this other guy for like the same amount of time. He has a girlfriend right now though. What should I do? I used to talk to him all the time, and now that she's his friend and hates me, i havent talked to him since Summer Vacation (school already started for us) PLEASE HELP ME! dont saw stuff like screw them or anything because i cant. ive been driven crazy over, well, THEM!!!

this is sooo weird tho. i like him by mistake. i saw a guy i liked through a window i could tell he was smiling...at me. obviousli it wasnt zach, but i wont find the unknown i just grew onto zach.

Answer 1

Thats pretty good. It doesn't seem very original though.

Answer 2

She is probably jealous and insecure threatened by your relationship do not take it personally. Go on have another life. Make friends with her also. Get a boyfriend of your own or tell her we are just friends. Find someone else to fill that void. I have been there myself in the past eventually I just moved on. She may be a control freak and that is how she keeps her man tell Zach you will always be there if he needs a friend give you a ring but watch out about the love triangle stuff. I would go on there are so many other decent people in the world worth sharing time and your life with. It is our nature who are committed genetically to relationships to feel like this but there are plenty of others worth living for and going on for. I just think of all the time I spent being miserable that would have been better spent making myself feel better. Go get your nails done, your hair done, get a dress, go to a college class to improve yourself, take a language, take dancing lessons get involved with other people. Go to the spa with both genders at it.

Answer 3

the song is ok..
the songs short
the one verse you have is very short... its so short u never have a chance to feel the emotion in the words

you pick up the emotion when you get to the bridge and chorus


now for your problem...

first choose a guy


second (zach): i'm sure he has other friends that if something were to happen between the two of you you'd have to lean to deal with anyway. jus like you said she's HIS bestfriend and SHE hates you, not him. u never mentioned that you hate her.i'm sure as long as he sees you dont have a grudge against her and its all one sided he'll understand


third (the other guy): hes got a girlfriend. just be friends with him. if something happens between the two of you while you're friends then you got wat u wanted but if not you've made a friend and you have a fall back crush anyway right?

Answer 4

To get that simlie in the beggining more effective you should use the term "6 feet under" thats usually a expression for being dead, and you sound like thats what you are trying to potray.

And in the bridge where you say "Right now I feel confused, depressed and hurt
Like what is this worth?" You sound like a valley girl. Like, dude, like, what is this, like, worth. I wouldn't use "like" in a song if you want to sound serious and not like your joking around.

Writing things down is an effective way of controling your emotions.

Answer 5

Your sentence relies upon partly on your ideas-set, no factor having an intro that doesn't in good condition with the stability of your document. you are going to be able to desire to tell me what the e book is. yet even nevertheless i do no longer understand i will attempt to help. ok if u study your e book then basically tell what its approximately. provide actuality. a sturdy first sentence is something that occurs interior the commencing up.

Answer 6

I personally think its pretty good, specially 'cause you were inspired by your own feelings when you composed it. It would be nice though, to hear what it sounds like with background music. I hope you can solve your love life and have fun while you're at it. Good Luck!=)

Answer 7

well about ur song lyrics are good but u should now how to put the music... and i have a solution for ur probl , when u finish ur song.. means music too . send it to him on a cd in a mail or by the post. he'll be impressed i'm sure.. and no one knows what will happen later

Answer 8

so you changed it from the first time I saw it. catchy! so wheres the link to hear it?

ok, I found it, 3 weeks ago. the song is the same but the story is different. so I guess the lyrics grow on you, still would like the score.(music)

Answer 9

Hey baybay,

find a new guy who will care about you. You deserve that. Don't be cruel to the others that only makes you seem immature and selfish.

get on with your life.

Be happy

Answer 10

Beginning lines sound alot like a stanza in White Lines

It's a jungle sometimes
Sometimes it makes me wonder
How I keep from going under.

Answer 11

i would say great but i would be lying for points but who cares i still got points for this

but it is good if change things in the beginning and u never know u could became a singer