Hey there
Do you even notice that it’s all wrong?
That we’re all wrong?
That I am just a girl you bring along.
But I know you are searching for something more.
And I can’t stand in your way
Anymore.
I don’t know where things fell apart
But they did
And we grew apart.
So here I say
Goodbye.
It’s time,
It’s time,
Goodbye.
Just don’t stick around and ask me why
Just move on
Leave me now
When you see me in a crowd, just pass me by.
Because I know deep down that
We’re not right.
It’s not right.
So take this song
And move along.
And as I cry
It’s okay.
I’m okay.
It’s time,
It’s time,
…goodbye.
2006-08-26 08:09:39 · 13 answers · asked by lifeistough_period 1 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Visual Arts ➔ Other - Visual Arts
i would like to know why you think its important to tell people your age. This has nothing to do with your songwriting ability which I am afraid is not in any way remarkable, infact your lyrics are mundane, crass and based upon this example I wouldnt invite you to submit any further material. You are rejected.
2006-08-26 08:16:00 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
The lyrics have affect, especially speaking to the age group you seem to be targeting of 14-19.
Its hard to get a feel of a song and properly analyze it without the music, since music can add or detract from the basic idea of a piece, but just looking at the lyrics alone and assuming you are targeting a high school crowd, the lyrics do have potential.
Good luck! Keep writing :)
2006-08-26 15:17:45 · answer #2 · answered by thoughtfulwind 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
From 1-10 I give it a 3 ,10 being the best.
2006-08-26 15:16:12 · answer #3 · answered by The Main Man at Yahoo 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Your song gave me goose pimples, in a good way. Like Puffy got goose pimples when the one gal sang in making the band. You have some talent.
2006-08-26 17:30:37 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
sounds good. All though I am not a lyricist, there is probably too much repetition on some things, but overall, not bad.
2006-08-26 15:18:25 · answer #5 · answered by shortymaciam 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
it's pretty good, but it sounds a lot like other songs playing right now. try for something a little more original. otherwise, your rhythm/phrasing is alright.
2006-08-26 15:16:06 · answer #6 · answered by Lana 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i think its great. could be a lil longer... is this ur 1st attempt? even i put up my 1st attempt on yahoo answers.
keep writing.. u have potential
2006-08-26 15:15:16 · answer #7 · answered by cranberries 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
its great but i would love to hear it so if u ever make a cd make me a copy
2006-08-26 21:22:16 · answer #8 · answered by rockhead631 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it. You should think of having it published!
2006-08-26 15:16:45 · answer #9 · answered by tek1017 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
sounds good, could be a bit longer, do you already have a melody?
2006-08-26 15:20:13 · answer #10 · answered by heart_angela 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋