sometimes i think im lonely
im never all alone
the dead they send me visions
of violence and bones
at times i stop and wonder
do they ever sleep at all
or are they always waiting
for someone to hear their call
2006-08-25 06:00:11 · 14 answers · asked by darkangel1111 5 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
Good...I like it. It would make great lyrics to a song. That bit might be the refrain and your verses might tell a story of why you might be lonely, why you dream as you do, and/or why do you hear their call.
Good work!!!!!!
2006-08-25 06:13:59 · answer #1 · answered by Yim 3 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Absolutely wonderful.
2006-08-25 13:03:27 · answer #2 · answered by Cary Grant 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
thts nicee but r u okay u seemed a lil depressed or something
2006-08-25 13:09:33 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
yes...yes i do...moving words.
did you hear this by the way:
Springfield, Springfield, it's a hell of a town
The schoolyard's up and the shopping mall's down
The stray dogs go to the animal pound
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cheer up, fellow!!
2006-08-25 13:13:43 · answer #4 · answered by Sheefa 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
thats cool keep up the good work
2006-08-25 13:03:30 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
A little morbid,but other than that,it's pretty good.
2006-08-25 13:05:51 · answer #6 · answered by jayne s 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
is ok a little short though
2006-08-25 13:35:44 · answer #7 · answered by Bullchit 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
nice
2006-08-25 13:03:48 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
i love your poem. you have great expression skills.
2006-08-25 13:22:19 · answer #9 · answered by nite_pixie_girl 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Good.
Grim, but good.
2006-08-25 13:09:35 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋