i been slavin on it all mornin but it needs more new input!!!
2006-08-25 02:31:58 · 20 answers · asked by goodbye and good luck :-) 1 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Other - Entertainment
would anyone care to oblige?
2006-08-25 02:33:41 · update #1
if someone emails me how to put a link to it i will do so... i got it stored in pieces all over the place...don't wanna get it nicked offa me lol!
thanks guys xxxxxxxxxx
2006-08-25 02:37:25 · update #2
okay here is my email if you wanna help
draegonslayer2004@yahoo.co.uk
2006-08-29 02:53:12 · update #3
Yeh I would - I offer critiques on a writers website if you email it to me then I would love to look at it and give you constructive criticism. Get in touch.
2006-08-27 11:45:32 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
you ought to replace this section: "His spouse had died seven years in the past, and his 2 children" because later in the tale you reported " His children visited two times a three hundred and sixty 5 days." It basically makes it slightly puzzling becuase some human beings would imagine that his basically 2 children died, and some how they visited him. per chance you would possibly want to assert "His spouse had died seven years in the past, alongside with 2 of his 4 (or regardless of form of children he has) children." except that sounds tremendous! i might want to honestly save on interpreting it! I desire i might want to comprehend what exceeded off next! per chance you would possibly want to have him finally live to inform the tale yet is in a small cubed room pitch black, or you would possibly want to have him awaken from and say he had a nightmare or a creative and prescient of the destiny. this variety of vast quantity of opportunities yet basically one you'll chosen! once back i might want to save on interpreting it and that i basically LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE like it! i desire you save on writing and change into an exceedingly properly-known author and a Neonatal Nurse.
2016-11-27 20:30:16 · answer #2 · answered by ? 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
put it on the internet and give us a link in a new question and ill read it and post what i think. i love reading and aspire the be an author
2006-08-25 02:35:25 · answer #3 · answered by element_dude 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Tom
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2006-08-25 02:36:55 · answer #4 · answered by ? 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Wow, that is too hard of a question to answer. I mean, I sincerely apologize, but my brain cells are hurting from trying to come up with an answer, I mean, OUCH!, that hurts.
2006-08-25 02:34:22 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
Where is the location of this story of yours?
2006-08-25 02:34:29 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
i used to tutor people in english all the time in college.
however, i can't help if you don't supply a link to your story.
2006-08-25 02:35:33 · answer #7 · answered by joey322 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Go to
www.shootingpeople.org
to find scriptwriters who can give you well informed story writing advice.
2006-08-25 07:22:57 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I sometimes call sleep 'peeps' has it got something to do with that?
2006-08-25 02:38:19 · answer #9 · answered by juliamc 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
:) OK wheres the story ??? cannot read if I don't see now can I :)
2006-08-25 02:35:42 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋