plzzzzzzzzzzzzzz! I really really need help!?

Question

Dear diary,
Today, when I got to school, I felt like that I got into a prison, or perhaps a hell. We have to listen our principal's boring speech for hours again, like yesterday! The only escape was the bathroom, for I had heard this speech numerous time in the past. When I got in to the bathroom, the wrost thing that had ever happended to me! My cellphone droped into the toilet! oh my gosh! It stinks! I wash my cellphone like a million of times, but the smell is still on the cellphone. When I got back to my seat, I act like nothing had happend, but I was so upset. while the stupid principal kept talking, I was sleeping, snorning, laughing, dancing, talking and gossiping. My friend gossip something I was not interested in, so I escape to the bathroom again. This time I was singing songs in the bathroom, what had happend this time was much much wrose then the last time. A teacher had came into the bath room too and she had heard me sing.

I was so embarresd so I rushed back to my seat as fast as I could! At lunch time, we had to eat those none tasty food. I almost throw up cause I saw fat meat. At night I play table tennis with my friend nicole, every time when I play with her I had won, but this time she had won. I think today many unlucky things had happend to me, I wish it will be better tomorrow.


I'm a Chinese and the teacher told us to write a english diary, so I'm wondering can you plzzzzzzzzzzzz help me? use your way of writing my diary or check if is there any grammar , spelling , phrase that is wrong! I can give you 10 points if u did a good job!(you can change or add many dificult or funny words in my diary, make my diary more interesting)

Answer 1

Dear diary,
Today, when I got to school, I felt like I went into a prison or perhaps the most boring act of performing monkeys I've ever seen. We had to listen to our principals boring speech for hours, AGAIN! Because we hear these speeches so often i have found my only escape was the bathroom. Then the worst thing ever has happened to me...I dropped my cell phone in the bubbling, stinking, poop filled toilet. Oh my gosh! It stinks! No matter how many times I wash it the smell is still there and with it being in my back pocket everyone now asks who pooped themselves?? I
go back to class and just sit there acting like nothing happened and I have no idea where the poop smell is coming from. through all this the principal is still talking! So I decided after my incident, I needed a nap and while I was sleeping guess what.. I was dreaming so I started snoring, laughing, talking, and I got up and started sleep dancing. My friends laughing hysterically at me woke me up and I made a rush back to the poop infested bathroom. The songs running in my sleep sounded really good so I started singing as loud as I could. However I wasn't alone and I realized it too late a teacher was in there and heard me singing. Could this day get any worse...Oh yeah it just did I have just had explosive diarrhea and didn't make it to the toilet to add to the poop that I dropped my phone into, and now I AM the one who smells like poop. Now I get to see the gross fat glop they call meat they offer us at lunch. Finally I get to go home and play table tennis with my friend Nicole. I am so embarrased by my poop smelling phone and now my pants that I lose my concentration. Usually I win this game but she beat me today. Could this just be a run of bad luck? Hopefully tomorrow will be better.

Answer 2

Dear diary,

When I got to school today, I felt like that I got into a prison, or perhaps a hell. We have to listen our principal's boring speech for hours again, like yesterday! The only escape was the bathroom, for I had heard this speech numerous times in the past. When I got into the bathroom, the worst thing happened! My cellphone dropped into the toilet! oh my gosh! It stinks! I washed my cellphone like a million of times, but the smell was still there. When I got back to my seat, I acted like nothing had happened, but I was so upset. While the stupid principal kept talking, I was sleeping, snorning, laughing, dancing, talking and gossiping. My friend gossipped something I was not interested in, so I escaped to the bathroom again. This time I was singing. What had happened this time was much, much worse than the last time. A teacher came into the bathroom too and she had heard me singing.

I was so embarrassed so I rushed back to my seat as fast as I could!

At lunch time, we had to eat those none tasty food . I almost threw up because I saw fat meat. --->try revising this one

Lately this night, I played table tennis with my friend nicole. Whenever I play with her, I always win, but this time she won.

I think many unlucky things had happend to me today, I wish tomorrow will be better.

Answer 3

Dear Diary,

Today, when I got to school, I felt like I had entered into a prison, or perhaps a hell. We have to listen our Principal's boring speech for hours again, like yesterday! The only escape was the bathroom, for I had heard this speech numerous time in the past. When I got to the bathroom, the worst thing ever happened to me! My cellphone dropped into the toilet! Oh my gosh! It stinks! I washed my cellphone like a million times, but the smell is still on it. When I got back to my seat, I acted like nothing had happend, but I was still upset. While the stupid principal kept talking, I was sleeping, snoring, laughing, dancing, talking and gossiping. My friend was gossipping about something I was not interested in, so I escaped to the bathroom again. This time I was singing songs in the bathroom, and this time was much much worse then the last time. A teacher came into the bath room, too, and she had heard me sing! How embarrassing!

Additional Details

4 minutes ago
I was so embarrassed that I rushed back to my seat as fast as I could! At lunch time, we had to eat some nasty food! I almost threw up because I saw the fat, greasy meat they had to offer. (Gag!) At night I play table tennis with my friend Nicole; usually every time I play with her I win, but this time she won!Today so many unlucky things happened to me! I sure hope it will be better tomorrow!

Answer 4

Dear diary,
Today, when I got to school, I felt like that I got into a prison, or perhaps hell. We had to listen our principal's long, boring speech again, just like yesterday! The only escape was the bathroom. When I got to the bathroom, the worst thing happened to me! I dropped my cellphone in the toilet! I washed my cellphone like a million of times, but it still stinks. When I got back to my seat, I acted like nothing had happened, but I was so upset. The principal kept talking, but I didn't pay attention. My friend said something I was not interested in, so I ran to the bathroom again. I started singing. Then, something even worse happened. A teacher came into the bathroom too and she had heard me sing.

Additional Details

12 hours ago
I was so embarrassed, I rushed back to my seat as fast as I could! At lunch time, we had to eat disgusting cafeteria food. I almost threw up when I saw the fat meat.
At night I played table tennis with my friend Nicole. She won, even though I always beat her. I think today many unlucky things happened to me; I hope tomorrow will be better.

You're pretty good. (:

Answer 5

Today, when I went to school, I felt as though i had entered a prison, or perhaps hell. My classmates and I had to listen to our Principal's boring speech, for hours again. As if we did not already hear it. The only escape for me was the bathroom, for I had heard this speech numerous time in the past. When I got in to the bathroom, the worse thing had happended to me. My cellphone droped into the toilet! The only thing i could think of was how bad it smelled.I shouted "Oh my gosh! It stinks! I washed my cellphone almost near a million times, but the smell just seem to not want to go away. After using the bathroom when I got back to my seat, I act as though nothing had happend, but in all reality I was so upset. As the principal continued talking, I started to drift into a day dream. All i kept thinking about was how bad i wanted to go home. I then turned to my friend and started telling her some jokes. We laughed, dance, and gossiped about things that we though were true. I soon began to loose interest in what my friend was gossiping about. I decided to escape to the bathroom again. This visit to the bathroom was much worse then what had happend earlier. This time I was singing in the bathroom, and by my surprise one of my teachers heard me and began to giggle. I was so embarrassed that i ran out of the bathroom back to my seat. Just the thought of my teacher hearing me was just to hilmilation. At lunch My classmates and I had to eat the worse meal ever. I almost throw up because of the smell that was coming from the food . Later on that day when i returned home from school My friend Nicole and I played table tennis. It did not seem like my lucky day, because every time I played with her I always won, but this time. She had won. I did not know what was going on with my day, but all I knew was that i wanted it to be over, and hopefull tomorrow is a new joyfull day.

Answer 6

Dear Diary,
Today, when I got to school, I felt like that I had gotten myself into a prison, or perhaps Hell. We had to listen our principal's boring speech for hours again, like yesterday! The only escape was the bathroom, for I had heard his same speech too many times in the past. When I got in to the bathroom, the worst thing ever happened to me! I had accidentally dropped my cell phone into the toilet! Oh my gosh! It stinks! I washed and scrubbed my cell phone like, a million of times, but the faint smell still lingered and it made me a bit nauseous. I hastily wrapped my cell phone in paper towels and stuck it in my pocket. When I got back to my seat, I act like nothing had happened, but I was very upset. The stupid principal was still talking! My friend started gossiping to me about something, but I wasn’t interested in what she has to say this morning so I nodded my head and pretended I was listening. I think I must’ve been dozing off because I was startled awake when she excitedly said, “Don’t you think it’s outrageous?!” I merely nodded my head in agreement and asked the teacher to go to the bathroom again, my only escape. This time I was singing songs in the bathroom, but what had happened this time was much, much worse then the last time. A teacher had come into the bathroom too and she had heard me singing! I was so embarrassed that I rushed back to my seat as fast as I could! At lunch time, we had to eat the nasty cafeteria food. I almost throw up right then on the tables when I saw fatty, chunky meat on my nachos! It was the most disgusting thing ever and, boy did it smell! At night I played table tennis with my friend Nicole. Usually when I play with her I win, but not this time. She had beaten me, but only because my mind had not been in the game at all. I’ve had so many unfortunate things happening to me today, but I wish for a better day tomorrow.

I really took my time to revise this good!

Answer 7

Since you're an ESL student (English as a Second Language) it is very important for you to stop using abbreviations to communicate. The nuances of the Engish language are difficult enough without confusing them further by using "u" as a pronoun instead of "you," "r" as a verb instead of "are." Also, remember that most Asian languages do not use articles, such as "the," "an" or "a," so be sure your English writing incorporates these grammatical necessities.
There is a great humor to your writing--all you need to do is bring this same warmth and insight to your classroom writing. The cellphone story is hilarious, for example, and as an instructor of college English I would be very pleased if one of my students wrote with this same brutal honesty.
In essence, you're worrying way too much about this assignment. In fact, you can use this same Yahoo entry as a journal entry. Your English is better than most native speakers online, so just relax and try to have fun with your writing.
Good luck,
Alana

Answer 8

Sounds like you've got some serious problems!!!!

Does the UN know about all this disaster?

Answer 9

print you question out and call it day 1's entry

Answer 10

no sugggestions it is already very good. best of luck in ur test