cant make a thesis statement to save my life please help?

Question

the topic is the death penalyt i do not htink it is moral its a persuacive essay and my rubric tells me i need a thesis statement that names the topic of the essay and the many points to be discussed but i cant think of a witty thesis staement i mean its hard to describe the points i make because i would perfer life imprisonment be given to people than the death penalty but i think that life imprisonment is too cusshy cushy io believe that we should throw people in solitary confinement you know little white rooms with no human contact and no electronics just a toilet and a blanket, i believe that an eye for an eye and the whole world goes blind i believe that i would rather have a mruderer living than be responsible for killling him killing is killing no matter why you do it so killing for punishment or revenge is just as wrong as what they have done i believe that we as people have no right to step in on the lords work by punishing people but how do i write this as a thesis statement

sudden burst of inspiration hows


though tweaks need to be made to our cushy, non-challenging, non punishmental, life imprionment system; capitol punishment is never the right choice.

Answer 1

i completely agree with ferosia. pick three points that you want to make in your essay and explain each one in a separate paragraph, giving your opinion and then info to back it up. but when you write your thesis, list those three points in the order that you are going to discuss them: the first point that you list in your thesis should be your first body paragraph, the second point should be your second body paragraph and your third point should be your third body paragraph. also...never say 'in this essay...' or 'this essay will...' or anything like that because it's incorrect.

Answer 2

This essay discusses the question of appropriate punishment for serious crimes, focusing particularly on the death penalty versus life imprisonment, and in the case of the latter, the conditions under which such a punishment should served. I will also examine the question of whether, as a society, we have a moral duty to focus on the rehabilitation of criminals, or whether we are in the business of revenge.

Answer 3

You need to be a little more precise about your key points. Pick 3 different key points that your essay will cover and include it in the thesis statement like so: The death penalty is clearly not the best method for handling severe crimes b/c it is immoral, reason 2, and reason3. Never ever ever say "In this essay I will cover"

Answer 4

I'm not going to give you your thesis statement, but I wanted to give you a lead for another piece of support for your paper. Capital punishment can be 'cruel and unusual' in a couple of ways. One is if the person was really innocent and was wrongly sentenced...there are instances of this happening. Also, when the instruments used to kill the prisoner malfunction, things can be really awful- burning people alive, etc. look into it.

Answer 5

The death penalty should be abolished because it is immoral, too easy, and (you need one more point here; since all you stated above is about the first two points).

you may want to tweak it a little too.

Answer 6

Keep it simple. It's obvious that you have strong feelings... Start with

I don't believe in the death penalty. This paper will outline and a show the death penalty is wrong for our society at large.

Answer 7

in my essaay i will show prove to you that the death penalty is not only immoral but that life in prison can be just as severe a punishment without loss of life.