Rain Drops
Rain beats on the window,
The mood becomes gloomy.
The rain is the tears of angels,
When something doesn’t go right.
And when the angels cry,
Everyone feels like crying.
Except the small children,
Who run and shout.
Their naivety is astounding,
Unaware that angels are weeping.
When the storm stops,
It seems a small miracle.
For God has cheered the angels,
As only He can.
So whenever the angels in Heaven cry,
They will always stop somehow.
That is the way of God,
And so look towards the sky and wait for the sun to shine.
What do you think? I made it up right now....
2006-08-23 12:14:38 · 14 answers · asked by ~S~ is for Stephanie! 6 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
I really like this.
I could see the image while I was reading this poem.
Keep up your excellent works! and have a good day!
2006-08-23 12:20:04 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
I think it needs some work, but is pretty good conceptually...
I took a stab at editing it, but you may like your version better:
Rain beats on the window,
The panes shed the tears of angels.
Sorrowing in their limitations.
Their mood expressed .universally.
Except the small children,
Who run and shout.
Innocent joyfulness,
Unaware that angels are weeping.
Then the tears stop
and the sky appears as if a miracle.
For God has cheered the angels,
As only He can.
So whenever the angels in Heaven cry,
They will always stop somehow.
That is the way of God,
And so look towards the sky and wait for the sun to shine.
2006-08-23 12:24:46 · answer #2 · answered by merigold00 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I'd give it a 4 on a scale of 1 to 10. Nice use of metaphor, but the rain as tears metaphor has been used a million times.
the use of irony of kids having fun in the rain was pretty good though. everything else was not all that original.
2006-08-23 12:18:42 · answer #3 · answered by Tones 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
yes very good poem but do you like mine lol The Love Of My Desire
the love that embraces my emotion's
the love of my disire the love that
embraces my emotion's
from the bottom of my heart
that over indulges me to try to influence you too stay
and too try to keep you satisfied and too feel greaty loved
like i truely do..
your kindness overwhelms my heart
and my personification of being loved again scares me.
because i've been hurt so many time's before.
then i look at how kind hearted and sweet you really are
then i truely know that..
their's nothing to worry about
because i know you love me and
i truly love you with all my heart
and soul
2006-08-23 12:24:07 · answer #4 · answered by thing s 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Yes is beautiful
2006-08-23 12:20:42 · answer #5 · answered by Claudia R 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It good, show a lot of meaning and sadness into it.
2006-08-23 12:17:24 · answer #6 · answered by Tori 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's really nice
2006-08-23 12:29:00 · answer #7 · answered by chikita4652 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Wow. You made me diabetic with that one!
2006-08-23 12:38:43 · answer #8 · answered by Catspaw 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I am sorry but I don't like it. It doesn't flow and it sounds preachy.
2006-08-23 12:17:56 · answer #9 · answered by mom 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think it's beautiful!!
2006-08-23 12:17:38 · answer #10 · answered by a_phantoms_rose 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋