Okay first of all i am only 12 and this is my first song:
May 19
It is that day
That day in May
When he broke my heart
And my world fell apart
2006-08-23 07:39:37 · 28 answers · asked by Stacie Gwen Lopez 1 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Music
Its only the begining
2006-08-23 07:39:56 · update #1
5
2006-08-23 07:40:28 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 1⤋
4
2006-08-23 07:41:05 · answer #2 · answered by Riss 4 · 1⤊ 2⤋
Good for you. Don't stop your music career. You'll stay successful if you don't quit writing songs. Your first song is good, but it needs a melody to be completely good, and to be completely a song. Sit down at your piano and let your fingers do the playing. Don't worry about the mistakes. You'll get better that way. Your lyrics might change, but you seem to understand love enough to start with a concept. That's all you need to get started writing songs, as long as you are brave. Mistakes don't matter, no matter how you feel about them, and no matter what anyone might say about you or your mistakes. Have fun!
2006-08-23 07:49:31 · answer #3 · answered by BrightGuy 1 · 3⤊ 0⤋
It's a good start. The first part might still need some work. You should try to revise that if you can. But keep on working on it. You'll get better!
2006-08-23 07:50:50 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
A little too rhymey (?)... try to break up the word pattern a little. Check some song writer web sites for help.
Oh yeah, and pay no attention to those losers who are talking iSht about your attempts. You are still young and have plenty of time to work on your craft. Keep it up!!!
2006-08-23 07:43:43 · answer #5 · answered by Ren Hoek 3 · 3⤊ 0⤋
if u have it at a fast beat it's like a 6 on a scale of 1-10 for a beginning but if it's slow i give it a 4
2006-08-23 07:42:31 · answer #6 · answered by monkey. 3 · 0⤊ 2⤋
words from the heart, are the ones that are true, music is the thread and love is the glue..splendid works are made when one dreams big, i rate em lyrics 9 and a half , do you dig?
keep writing
2006-08-23 07:52:41 · answer #7 · answered by eliminatortcx 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
These are pretty good for 12 year old, but you should find some rhymes that are less common and make the lines longer.
2006-08-23 07:45:43 · answer #8 · answered by Hen 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Good job. On a scale from 1 to 10, you get a 10!
Keep you the good work!!
2006-08-23 07:41:43 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 2⤋
1 worst 10 best i give that a 4 for effort also i think a song has that lyric already
2006-08-23 07:41:30 · answer #10 · answered by Dum Spiro Spero 5 · 2⤊ 2⤋