Has anyone ever told you how beautiful you are?
So beautiful and here you are with me.
From the very first I noticed, you are a gift to all of us,
and the holder of a very special key.
Do people try to stop you, so they can say, "I love you"?
You do spread love with every step you take.
Has anyone ever mentioned, you're a beautiful work of art?
You fill the hollow chambers in my heart.
You mean no one's ever whispered, you're nothing less than a miracle?
Well you're nothing less than a miracle to me.
Is it OK to tell you, that just your elegant presence,
makes me want to wrap myself in thee?
2006-08-23 01:15:25 · 20 answers · asked by Anonymous in Entertainment & Music ➔ Other - Entertainment
that is very sweet
your boyfriend will be so happy when you recite that to him
2006-08-23 01:22:13 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
Actually it's a simple nice poem.try not to use similar endings.keep it free like a piece of literrature.An even when it comes to love don't concetrate so much on the theme.Of course it depends on your style.Just an advice from another young poet who has friends true and great journalists and writers.You are not as luckuy but keep walking.:P.iTS COOL THAT U EVEN GOT TO DO THIS.Spend time writing your thoughts.It's art,even the thought of it.
2006-08-23 09:02:01 · answer #2 · answered by BlondieGd 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Not bad though i read better than that one .. Keep trying till you get better .. i like that part :
Has anyone ever mentioned, you're a beautiful work of art?
You fill the hollow chambers in my heart.
it rhymes :D
2006-08-23 08:19:51 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's sweet but having ok and thee in the same couplet kind of jangles the nerves.
2006-08-23 08:19:20 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
beautiful, truly beautiful. Sounds like you have one special lady, and part of the reason she is so special is that she has a man who loves her as much as you do. Congrats.
2006-08-23 08:18:55 · answer #5 · answered by munesliver 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
HAHA!!! that is the cheesiest poem. Are u a guy?? awww, youre into the sappy love stuff. and no, i dont like it. Why dont u try something original, there are like a milion poems just like that one.
2006-08-23 08:51:30 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
i like most of it, i just have my doubts about the last 2 sentences. it doesn't really fit with the rest. then again, that's just my opinion! i like the rest though, very sweet
2006-08-23 08:21:39 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Most excellent
2006-08-23 08:23:11 · answer #8 · answered by sarch_uk 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Aww I liked it a lot. How cute
2006-08-23 08:17:20 · answer #9 · answered by tre_wingo 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
u know Shekspear has started with nothing better than this and ended up where ???
keep it up;and yes i like it!
2006-08-23 08:18:50 · answer #10 · answered by hi there 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
here is a poem i made up.
roses are red
violets are blue
your so beautiful
its really true.
i just just made that up
2006-08-23 08:22:30 · answer #11 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋