She sits next to me and i feel my tempreture rise, this warm friendly & beautiful woman with starlight in her eyes.
I feel my heart beat faster, my stomach feels so tight, i want to take her by the hand and dance with her all night.
But sadly this could never be, she loves another and its not me, she loves him though he's vain and cruel, he puts her down and calls her fool.
My mouths gone dry , my legs are weak, she says hello but i can't hardly speak.
How do i act around this lady i adore, what do you do when your heart just can't take no more....
2006-08-22 07:16:16 · 20 answers · asked by Richard 6 in Family & Relationships ➔ Other - Family & Relationships
omg wow that is amazing and so sweet, you should be a poet, maybe you are, i dont know lol anyways well done, its so good :D
2006-08-22 07:39:14 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
well there r a few literary mistakes, but aside that, it is very good. so r u speaking 2 someone that u know on a personal level. if u do then u should give it 2 her directly. if she is indeed with an individual that treats her like this, she may be one of these women who thinks she deserves no better. it is up 2 u 2 let her know what u could do 4 her & how she is so much more deserving of someone who could worship the ground that she walks on. she sounds like she has no self esteem left & u would have 2 b very supportive & re-build her into the woman u know she is. good luck
2006-08-22 14:36:39 · answer #2 · answered by ladydi 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Awwwww! Bless ya! That is so lovely! I think you've caught the hearts of many young ladies on here. There's nothing more sweeter than being romantic and its nice to see a guy express his feelings so openly the way you have. I wish you every happiness!
2006-08-22 16:26:08 · answer #3 · answered by fairydust 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i think it's lovely
but
dnt pin all your hopes on this girl
turn around & you will find there are plenty more out there in the big wide world
you will find another who will make you feel special
hopes & dreams will come true
there is some one out there just for you
so turn around & you will see that very special lady
hope you like mine
good luck
2006-08-22 14:54:16 · answer #4 · answered by just ask jo 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Awesome - you could make a song from that! Whoever you wrote that about doesn't know what she is missing - you are one romantic guy! And whoever catches you is one lucky girl!
2006-08-22 14:29:13 · answer #5 · answered by ? 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
you smarmy Alli cat !!!! you just want all the birds to think your different all sensitive and nice your poem is good but come on you blokes are all the same sweet talk and full of bull!!!!
2006-08-22 16:16:20 · answer #6 · answered by hazilbabe 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
That is a really sweet poem you need to take a poetry class.
2006-08-22 14:30:50 · answer #7 · answered by missouri_horse_blue 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I really like that I have a soft spot for poams but I would end it like this
What do you do when your heart is sore
2006-08-22 14:48:00 · answer #8 · answered by ? 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
its really sweet yes, maybe brush up on ur literature a bit tho? cant take no more??>>cant take anymore etc
2006-08-22 14:29:04 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
You are the weakest link, Goodbye. lol only kidding quite good really.
2006-08-22 14:28:37 · answer #10 · answered by Elliott_Ward 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋