Well I'm writing out an english assigment and need help with this sentence:
"Cherry Valance would have testified in court, against the Socs for drinking way too much alcohol."
I don't like the "Way too much alcohol bit." Is there another word of which I can use in its place?
2006-08-19 15:34:24 · 22 answers · asked by xox_angel 3 in Education & Reference ➔ Homework Help
Get rid of the comma and way
2006-08-19 15:57:44 · answer #1 · answered by MollyMAM 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Try this:
"Cherry Valance would have testified in court against the Socs for drinking too much alcohol."
Or:
"Cherry Valance would have testified in court against the Socs for excessive drinking."
Sometimes, adverbs create clutter. If I had the surrounding context, I could provide a better answer.
2006-08-19 22:39:59 · answer #2 · answered by wheezer_april_4th_1966 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Cherry Valance would have testified in court against the Socs for being intoxicated.
2006-08-20 00:07:53 · answer #3 · answered by Goldenrain 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Cherry Valance would have testified in court against the Socs for their overconsumption of alcohol.
2006-08-19 22:54:06 · answer #4 · answered by chelsea 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
1) Delete "way" and you will have a proper sentence.
2) "Cherry Valance would have testified in court about the Socs overuse of alcohol."
If I understood exactly what you wanted to say, I could reword it properly.
2006-08-19 22:46:39 · answer #5 · answered by arejokerswild 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think the comma is another thing that is throwing the sentence off..it doesnt seem to be in the right place....like when you read it....the pause(for the comma) is a lil awkward...
maybe...Cherry Valance would have testified in court against the socs for having drank too much alcohol...if i didnt help im sorry....but honestly the comma throws it off. good luck
2006-08-19 22:41:31 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Because the Socs drank too much alcohol, Cherry testified against them
2006-08-19 22:40:57 · answer #7 · answered by Ken J 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Cherry Valance would have testified against the Socs in court for drinking too much alcohol. ..... for being intoxicated? for getting drunk?
2006-08-19 22:41:46 · answer #8 · answered by Too-Nice 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
"Cherry Valance would have testified against the Socs in court for consuming too much alcohol."
2006-08-19 22:40:05 · answer #9 · answered by lizziemrocks 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
against the Socs for drinking way too much alcohol.
could be said for consuming an excessive amount of alcohol. or against the socs for being under the influence of alcohol. ...maybe..
2006-08-19 22:42:48 · answer #10 · answered by to whom it may confide 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
CHERRY VALANCE WOULD HAVE TESTIFIED IN COURT AGAINST THE SOCS FOR BEING UNDER THE INFLUENCE OF ALCOHOL. OR YOU MIGHT USE THE WORD INEBRIATED.... INSTEAD OF UNDER THE INFLUENCE...............
2006-08-23 21:35:44 · answer #11 · answered by flowerspirit2000 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋