how's this poem ?

Question

i've translated them from my language , so maybe u don't understand them well :
Oh,come with me , and leave the Wise
To talk one thing is certain , that life flies ;
One thing is certain and the rest is lies ;
The flower that once has blown for ever dies .
what about this :
I sent my soul through the Invisible ,
some letter of that after life to spell :
And by and by my soul return'd to me ,
And answer'd "I myself am Heav'n and hell."

Answer 1

Oh, come with old Khayyam, and leave the Wise
To talk; one thing is certain, that Life flies;
One thing is certain, and the Rest is Lies;
The Flower that once has blown forever dies.

Unless you are Edward Fitzgerald, this is not something that YOU translated from your language.

And here's more of Fitzgerald:

70
I sent my Soul through the Invisible,
Some letter of that After-life to spell:
And by and by my Soul return'd to me,
And answer'd "I Myself am Heav'n and Hell:"

71
Heav'n but the Vision of fulfill'd Desire,
And Hell the Shadow of a Soul on fire,
Cast on the Darkness into which Ourselves,
So late emerg'd from, shall so soon expire.

I could keep going. Hell is, indeed, the shadow of a soul on fire.

Answer 2

Did you write that? It was good. I wish I could write poetry. Whoever wrote it did a good job. You can tell that it was translated from a different language but the point is still there.

Answer 3

I like the second one!!I really like poetry,I wish I could write it!!!The first part was good too.

Answer 4

I think that first one has totally opposite meaning than the other...

Answer 5

It sound like some kinda religion poems haha..but nice stuff there.

Answer 6

i like it! very well put!

Answer 7

excellent!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!