She waits in sorrow her father has left. Her mother is crying afraid of his death. One day at school a phone call and she knows. The sadness within her the remorse grow's. No more dad. No one to comfort her when she's sad. Her heart is breaking. No comfort she's taking. Her friends they can't help her. No where can she shelter. Away from this pain that's been given.
I wrote that for anyone who's dad went to war and who didn't come back.
2006-08-18 14:16:51 · 11 answers · asked by suohthedragon 2 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
well my dad didn't goto war and he is still here with me. but that was really nice thumbs up for you! that was really kind and i hope it really comforts some people out there.♥
2006-08-18 14:23:38 · answer #1 · answered by I Luv Joel Madden!! 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Awww thats so beautiful! I loved it and Im so sorry about your dad. He ment the world but now you can find a good friend or a boyfriend!
2006-08-18 21:23:28 · answer #2 · answered by Tiffanyy :] 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Pathetic!
2006-08-19 02:43:57 · answer #3 · answered by Ðøwñ tø Ëã®th 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Your poem is beautiful and very sad. It touch my heart.
2006-08-18 21:23:48 · answer #4 · answered by Zeta 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Once you correct your misspellings and put it in stanza form it will read much smoother.
Otherwise, good thoughts expressed.
2006-08-18 21:54:45 · answer #5 · answered by Guitarpicker 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
How thoughtful. It will help lots of people.
2006-08-18 21:24:22 · answer #6 · answered by NANCY K 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
yes
2006-08-18 21:22:05 · answer #7 · answered by Anry 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
nice prose
2006-08-18 21:22:59 · answer #8 · answered by lucky1 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
its ok, but its no Chris Battams
2006-08-18 21:23:22 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
sad.
2006-08-18 21:22:45 · answer #10 · answered by wag35 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋