"SMOKING FEATHERS"
Please
Pull out these Smoking Feathers
I don't want them anymore
So many battles I have won
But lost so many more
Faith in my country
And in my fellow man
Faith in God
Has made me what I am
Pull out these Smoking Feathers
I don't like what they represent
What once stood for strength and freedom
Is now only hell bent
How many lives will be taken
By these wings on my back
How many more Children will die
For the causes under Sams hat
Pull out these Smoking Feathers
I don't want them anymore
They burn the deepest part of me
I no longer want to be Sams' whore
I want to change my name
And the color of my skin
maybe dig a big hole
That I can hide in
I'm no longer proud
To be an American
Pull out these Smoking feathers
2006-08-16 01:51:06 · 10 answers · asked by tonywdidit 2 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
SOunds like the Eagle (the American symbol) talking. He has a problem with the stuff America is doing in his name.
I thought it was very good. You know you can go to http://www.poems-and-quotes.com and submit it there. It is just a poem forum for everyday writers. People can read and rate it and leave comments.
2006-08-16 01:58:23 · answer #1 · answered by < Roger That > 5 · 1⤊ 2⤋
It's choppy and uneven. Doesn't really make sense. You take credit for winning so many battles. Are you an army of one? Are the feathers on your back a warbonnet or angel's wings or what? Why is children capitalized? The only thing you made clear is that you are no longer proud to be an American.
I do commend you on your attempt to express yourself. Perhaps if you take a creative writing course or two, then travel to other counties around the world ( just pick countries at random) whether they are in a war zone or not. I have a feeling when you returned you might be singing a different tune.
2006-08-16 09:14:31 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
It makes me miss my baby brother who is A MP for the army
very sad...:( but a nice poem
2006-08-16 08:58:25 · answer #3 · answered by Green_Eyez:) 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It sounds like a gut wrenched feeling of what your God and country has given you to deal with...
Very well written...
2006-08-16 09:20:19 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
Nicely said.
2006-08-16 08:59:22 · answer #5 · answered by Ms_4peace 5 · 0⤊ 1⤋
ur poem is pointing that ur heart is crying..u can see the condition of ur nation..its lossin whatever the nation had to proud...there is something which is making u to run....but u r helpless...
2006-08-16 08:59:58 · answer #6 · answered by Ankit 2 · 0⤊ 2⤋
You where used and you don't want to be American. it means to rip your package off your body and your a Nazi.
2006-08-16 08:57:47 · answer #7 · answered by girl176a1 3 · 1⤊ 1⤋
I'll help you dig the hole!
2006-08-16 09:00:24 · answer #8 · answered by yourdayscoming 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
That was kwl. Good job.
2006-08-16 08:57:33 · answer #9 · answered by Game Guy 5 · 0⤊ 2⤋
a glimpse of what u feel...........
2006-08-16 08:57:31 · answer #10 · answered by zorba 1 · 0⤊ 1⤋