Here I am,
On the ground.
My life’s broken,
But I don’t make a sound.
Pick myself up,
Why even try?
Just to be shoved back down again…
I’ve fallen so many times, I’ve run out of tears to cry…
Broken heart,
Once again.
But I can barely feel it anymore.
I’m becoming accustomed to the pain.
Once more…
Shattered pieces of this once whole life,
Lay in my hands.
Cutting through, ever so silently,
But no one understands.
My mouth is closed,
But my heart is torn wide open.
Screaming,
For someone to hear me.
Bleeding,
For someone to see me.
Dying,
For someone to heal me.
Just for someone to come along tonight
And take everything in my life that’s wrong
And make it right.
Just to stay with me…
….please stay with me, tonight….
2006-08-15 03:53:29 · 14 answers · asked by lifeistough_period 1 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Visual Arts ➔ Other - Visual Arts
I think it's very sad. My heart goes out to you sweetie. I think you need some parental advice, and care, and some friends to encourage you in your time of need.
2006-08-15 04:00:25 · answer #1 · answered by Miss America 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Typical but sums up how you feel. It's not a publishable poem--amateurish and says nothing new--but it obviously got something off your chest and that is what poetry is truly for. I often, half jokingly, describe the writing of poetry as taking a good crap. Forgive the imagery, but I think the analogy is sound. Keep writing as long as its cathartic.
2006-08-15 11:01:54 · answer #2 · answered by Alobar 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Poems stem from raised emotions...sometimes deep within the soul...sometimes from those just laying upon surface...
It is a good poem...something which reflects what you were feeling in those moments...a good way of release and for reflection, in the future.
Check RagMagOrg...they look for poetry to post for readers to share if you want to get something 'out' there...
2006-08-15 12:24:02 · answer #3 · answered by RagMagOrg 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think you have a gift for expressing your innermost feelings on paper, painting a vivid picture, and moving others by your art. I was deeply moved by your pain. For a poetry website, you may want to go to http://www.poetry.com. You can submit your work for review, and learn from others. It is wonderful that you have writing as an outlet for your thoughts and feelings.
2006-08-19 02:33:26 · answer #4 · answered by Rhonda 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
keep writing. Join a poetry club. Enter a poetry
contest. Nothing to lose, perhaps a lot to gain.
2006-08-15 11:07:47 · answer #5 · answered by sky2seas 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's a really good poem but sounds depressing hope you are not really feeling this way.
2006-08-15 11:02:48 · answer #6 · answered by Lauren D 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Keep Writing - it's a lovely poem.....and keep hoping. THat someone special will arrive !
2006-08-15 23:01:44 · answer #7 · answered by Sarah L 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
listen... when it comes to art these days (music, poetry, books). it's all about who you know. that poem is just as good as some of the bullsht I had to read in highschool
2006-08-15 11:00:12 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very nice and very sad.
2006-08-17 19:31:50 · answer #9 · answered by KIMBO 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
it's not bad
I enjoy it.
But you can work on it to make it better.
keep working
good luck
2006-08-15 11:15:00 · answer #10 · answered by Koorosh 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋