Is there anything wrong with these sentences? 10 point!!??

Question

Please read patiently if these sentences have any errors. I need to submit my school ideas by tomorrow and have some problems with my wordings!! Please correct to the BEST you can. 10 points for best. THANKS.
A pillar that stands tall and erect, symbolizes the strong foundation. A concept of blue, elicits a simple yet elegant sense surrounding the area.
Behind the transparent design, a life philosophy revealed. It assents the architectural design in exhibiting the virtue of aptitude development to an unlimited extent.
Located at Maine road, we are proud to present our U.S 6th Aztech automobile grand showroom which is now officially launched for exhibition spectacular.
To put our best foot forward, we aspire to serve our customer with hospitality and attentive in mind. Customers not only can look forward to our courteous and feel-at-home after-sales-services, they can also expect our undaunted spirit in providing professionalism in automobile repairs and services.

Answer 1

Here are my sentences:

1) A pillar that stands tall and erect, symbolizes A( instead of 'the') strong foundation. A concept of blue exhibits(instead of 'elicits') a simple yet elegant sense sorrounding the area.

2) Behind the transparent design, A PHILOSOPHY OF LIFE IS(missing) revealed. It assents the architectural design .............(no change in the remaining sentence)

3) We are proud to present our 6th Aztech automobile grand showroom located at Maine road, which is now officially launched for exhibition to spectators(instead of 'spectacular). (The construction of the sentence is changed to bring the subject first.)

4) To put our best foot forward, we aspire to serve our customer with hospitality and ATTENTIVENESS(changed to noun form - like hospitality) of mind. Customers can look forward, NOT ONLY( changed its position in the phrase) to our courteous and feel-at-home after-sales-services but also to our undaunted spirit in providing PROFESSIONAL( changed from noun to adjective) automobile repairs and services.

All the best.

Answer 2

I will put my suggestions in parenthesis.

A pillar that stands (remove: tall and) erect symbolizes ("a" instead of "the") strong foundation. ("The" instead of "a") concept of blue (elicits a simple, yet elegant ambiance). (The transparent design reveals a life philosophy while it assents the architecture by exhibiting the unlimited virtues of developing aptitudes. Located at Maine Road, we proudly wish to present our 6th U.S. Aztech automobile grand showroom which is now open for exhibition spectaculars. In putting our best foot forward, we aspire to serve our customers with hospitality and attention to detail in mind.) NO MORE MODIFICATIONS NEEDED, THE REST OF YOUR TEXT IS FINE.

Hope that helps. Good Luck!!!

Answer 3

nicely the 1st "sentence" is a fraction. do this: A pillar status tall and erect symbolizes the reliable commencing up, a considered blue elicit, an undemanding yet stylish experience, surrounding the section.

Answer 4

I don't think you need commas after "erect" or "blue" in the first 2 sentances. you need a verb in the 3rd sentance ("is/was revealed"). You need a period after the S in "U.S". "hospitallity and attentive" should be hospitallity and attentiveness. In the last sentance, you need a semi-colon between "services" and "they" (or you can add "and" between them or make them 2 separate sentances)

Answer 5

what kind of question is this

Answer 6

forget it