Please read patiently if these sentences have any errors. I need to submit my school ideas by tomorrow and have some problems with my wordings!! Please correct to the BEST you can. 10 points for best. THANKS.
A pillar that stands tall and erect, symbolizes the strong foundation. A concept of blue, elicits a simple yet elegant sense surrounding the area.
Behind the transparent design, a life philosophy revealed. It assents the architectural design in exhibiting the virtue of aptitude development to an unlimited extent.
Located at Maine road, we are proud to present our U.S 6th Aztech automobile grand showroom which is now officially launched for exhibition spectacular.
To put our best foot forward, we aspire to serve our customer with hospitality and attentive in mind. Customers not only can look forward to our courteous and feel-at-home after-sales-services, they can also expect our undaunted spirit in providing professionalism in automobile repairs and services.
2006-08-12 20:27:15 · 9 answers · asked by Anonymous in Education & Reference ➔ Words & Wordplay
A pillar that stands tall and erect symbolizes the strong foundation. A concept of blue elicits a simple yet elegant sense surrounding the area.
Behind the transparent design lies a life philosophy revealed. It assents the architectural design in exhibiting the virtue of aptitude development to an unlimited extent.
Located at Maine road, we are proud to present our U.S 6th Aztech automobile grand showroom which is now officially launched for exhibition spectacular.
Putting our best foot forward, we aspire to serve our customers with hospitality and attention. Customers not only can look forward to our courteous and homely after-sales-services, they can also expect our undaunted spirit in providing professionalism in automobile repairs and services.
2006-08-12 20:49:29 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Some of your language is so confusing that I don't know what you mean...but I'm going to attempt to rewrite this below.
A pillar that stands tall and erect, symbolizes our strong foundation. The color blue sends a message of simplicity and elegance.
Behind the transparent design, a life philosophy is revealed. The architectural design is meant to convey our commitment to quality.
We are proud to present our U.S 6th Aztech automobile grand showroom, a spectacular exhibition located at Maine road and now officially launched.
We aspire to serve each customer with hospitality and personal attention in mind. Customers can look forward not only to our courteous and feel-at-home after-sales-services, they can also expect our total commitment to providing professionalism in automobile repairs and services.
2006-08-12 23:44:21 · answer #2 · answered by keepsondancing 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
symbolises A strong foundation
How can design be transparent? And I didn't know aptitude development was a virtue!
We are proud to present our ..........showroom which is located at Main road and is officially launched for exhibition.(spectacular?)
attention not attentive in mind.
Don't include " to put our best foot forward"
There is no feel at home after sales service. You could say good after sales service.
They can also expect us to provide professionalism in.....
2006-08-12 20:41:19 · answer #3 · answered by rakazx2 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
First sentence, delete the comma: the clause following is dependent. Second sentence, ditto. Third sentence, no verb: add "is" following "philosophy", and replace "in" with "by". Next sentence, invert the last two words: in English, adjectives precede the modified words. Next sentence, unless there really is just one, say "customers"; also, "attentive" should be "attention" (although the resulting construction is awkward). Last sentence is okay. The whole thing sounds artificial and pretentious, but that is apparently beside the point.
2006-08-12 20:39:15 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
You must indent before every paragraph. You don't need a comma after the word "erect" in the 1st sentence, and you don't need one after "blue" in the second sentence. I think in the second paragraph second sentence, you mean "accents" instead of "assents". Third paragraph, instead of "U.S", it must be "U.S.", you missed that last period there. Last paragraph, first sentence, instead of "customer", you write "customers", it's a plural word. Good luck, and I'm so glad that I could help! =)
2006-08-12 20:33:52 · answer #5 · answered by Dolly 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
(dont look at this answer all funny i am just tired and dont feel like typing the right way)
u need a comma after tall. a comma after simple .ur fourth sentence i have no idea wat " it" is so use another word. ur fith sentence needs one of these ";" after showroom . in the sixth sentence who is "our" i dont know what u are talking about...comma after hospitality. comma after curteous and change the comma after services to one of these ";" and i dont know about after repairs but i think u should put a comma there.
(hope i helped i tried my best to use that AP english ...good luck)
2006-08-12 20:44:51 · answer #6 · answered by frostie21 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
if u can write so good then why do u have to check by someone else. have confidence on ur self.
good work
2006-08-12 20:35:08 · answer #7 · answered by the brillant once! 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i'm with "imbetterthanyou"...i worked on that one a while!
2006-08-13 06:30:34 · answer #8 · answered by uranus2mars 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
now, you tell me the rest.
view my answer on your other question.
2006-08-12 22:26:34 · answer #9 · answered by Elerth Morrow ™ 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋