The sentence "A pillar standing tall and erect symbolizing the strong foundation. A concept of blue elicit a simple yet elegant sense surrounding the area.Behind the transparency design, it has clearly revealed a life philosophy, which also assent the architectural design in exhibiting virtue of aptitude development to an unlimited extent." Is there anything wrong with this sentence? Need help for my school project. please amend to the BEST you can, 10 points!!! thanks.
2006-08-12 19:20:36 · 21 answers · asked by Delight4eva 1 in Local Businesses ➔ United Kingdom ➔ London
the problem is thats more than one sentence!
2006-08-12 19:22:36 · answer #1 · answered by Sherry Baby ( Ethan's Mama ) 6 · 2⤊ 0⤋
That isn't a sentence, but a paragraph. Here are my corrections.
A pillar standing tall and erect symbolizing the strong foundation. A concept of blue elicit*S* a simple yet elegant sense surrounding the area. Behind the transparency design, it has clearly revealed a life philosophy, which also assent*S* the architectural design in exhibiting *THE* virtue of aptitude development to an unlimited extend."
2006-08-13 02:28:13 · answer #2 · answered by TwilightWalker97 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
A pillar standing tall and erect (symbolizes) the strong foundation.
A concept of blue (elicits) a simple, yet elegant, sense surrounding the area.
Behind the transparency design, which also (assents) the architectural design in exhibiting virtue of aptitude development to an unlimited extent, it clearly (reveals) a life philosophy.
Besides extremely poor sentence structure, it doesn't make much sense, but that's about all I could do with what you gave me.
2006-08-13 02:32:07 · answer #3 · answered by krazykritik 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
The first two are not complete sentances. You could say "The pillar is standing tall...." and "There is a concept of blue elicit and a simple....."
You also need a "s" on assnet, since there is only one design.
And you need to say "exhibiting the virtue of aptitude"
OK thats all I guess... other people probably know better than I do. Although my mom does teach english.
2006-08-13 02:25:33 · answer #4 · answered by DeAd DiScO 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Um I Cant Be Sure Because I Have No Idea What Its Talking About, There Is Alot Of Big Words! But Um Im Guessing Theres Some Grammer Errors And It Need To Be Dumbed Down A Bit!
2006-08-13 02:24:20 · answer #5 · answered by xpoisonousxinjectionx 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
yes, that's a paragraph. Besides I have over 20 years of education, writing is a form of communication. I have no Idea what you are trying to communicate, I have spoken with neurosurgeons that are more down to earth than you. Just because something is grammatically correct does not make it a good sentence. If your school is teaching you this is the way to go they are doing you a disservice. Unless your job is selling B.S. to dumb rich *******
2006-08-13 02:32:58 · answer #6 · answered by Patrick Bateman 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's actually a paragraph, but anyway, the first "sentence" is a fragment. The subject/verb agreement in the second sentence is wrong. And it should read "behind the transparent design..." in the third sentence.
2006-08-13 02:26:24 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
1. It is a group of sentences which is otherwise known as a paragraph.
2. Yes, there is something wrong with each of them - some of them are nightmares to decipher. Frankly, I think your teacher should be stoned.
The first sentence requires a comma between 'erect' and 'symbolising'.
2006-08-13 02:25:05 · answer #8 · answered by suzanne 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
This sentence is not complete. It lacks sufficient elaboration to be able to correct it. The ideas are too fragmented, so I was not able to rewrite a meaningful correction. If you have more background to this info, toss me an email and I'll fix this thing for ya'!
2006-08-13 02:27:43 · answer #9 · answered by -superkid- 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
There are many things wrong with each sentence. I can't even begin to decipher a few of them; sorry I can't help you with any editing.
2006-08-13 02:27:28 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's not a sentence. It's a paragraph. Looks fine to me. Of course, I found it pretty boring.
2006-08-13 02:23:23 · answer #11 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋