Edge - E. Motketsan
Through chilling light I escaped all reason
only to have reached the dark creative edge
Down the sheer wall, stones of knowledge slipped
not even a whisper's breath rose from its depth
Looking back to all that's known
time had stopped and quests concluded
In majestic silence a leap of faith
to awaken the soul of fettered content.
2006-08-12 13:21:08 · 14 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
It says to me.... whoever wrote this is... is at a crossroads.... As if thru some "experience" they've reached this place, perhaps an unfortunate incident brought them to this edge.... where... with good reason they could choose, the dark-side so to speak.... or.... maybe, just maybe... one more time abandon the negativiity and try to again....be free.... to succeed.. .to be happy... to..... live doing what one wants....a crossroads... to break free from the past... and enter into a future of......happiness, I guess... that's what I got out of it.
2006-08-12 13:30:04 · answer #1 · answered by Piper 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I appreciate the crisp words and vivid description, but the rhythm makes it a very awkward read. The lines don't flow into each other as a coherent unit, but seem a little "chopped" up. Seems a little over-ambitious.
2006-08-12 23:17:00 · answer #2 · answered by MegySu 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Nice
2006-08-12 20:49:03 · answer #3 · answered by FusionQ 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Too many ideas going on here. Rhythm is broken. Tense inconsistent. Could really be good with editing.
2006-08-12 21:35:55 · answer #4 · answered by Teacher 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Sounds like a person who has just reach the end of his/her life.
2006-08-12 20:23:41 · answer #5 · answered by Jason 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
You're 8 quatrains short of a sonnet?
2006-08-12 20:25:02 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I'm not sure if you are awakening from a dream or entering one, but nice poem, Eddy.
2006-08-12 21:49:01 · answer #7 · answered by swarr2001 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Awakening of artistic flair, a renewal of faith
2006-08-12 20:23:52 · answer #8 · answered by Suspended 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Writer's block..and the worst kind, when words are used to fill space.
2006-08-12 20:23:48 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
A PERSON WHO IS FOLLOWING FOR THEIR GOAL ,BUT ONCE AGAIN HAS FAILED, BUT THEIR WILLING TO SEARCH FOR A FUTURE THEN TO GO BACK IN THE REMAINGS OF THEIR PAST.
2006-08-12 20:29:42 · answer #10 · answered by tania_espinoza17 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋