i was bored today.......this is what happend...im single, so its not really for anyone
the warmest winter is passing through while snow melts on impact. the air of spring is pushing cold bitter nights away and i can see the sun in the night sky burning and drying all of these tears. morning is finally on its way opening my eyes from my nightmare and mourning is kissing me goodbye for the last time. hope's lips are the threshold sweet upon my cheek welcoming me to my eyes visioning nothing but the best because the worst is only history............
2006-08-11 19:01:33 · 25 answers · asked by playaninstrument 3 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
awwwwwwwww!!!!!!! mary me!
2006-08-11 19:04:31 · answer #1 · answered by chica 4 God 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I would wonder where the punctuation was.There wasnt enough. But it was sweet.Too bad it made no sense. Try words from other places than the "Word Of The Day" email from dictionary.com. M
2006-08-12 23:35:33 · answer #2 · answered by noircorazon 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I won't do this one, but check your email...I critiqued the one you just submitted that you withdrew....any girl would be lucky to have a wonderful poet like you, hon....fyi, I am a poet myself and you are very good....on your other one, I changed nothing but the form, because your use of the language, imagery, flow and expression are unsurpassedâ¥
2006-08-12 02:09:34 · answer #3 · answered by Kiss my Putt! 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I would be disturbed by the lack of capitalization, the misspelled words, and the poor grammar. I don't understand the passage, but the poor writing makes me not want to re-read it for understanding.
2006-08-12 02:05:39 · answer #4 · answered by SM 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Good, but here's something more romantic, I presume.
Boy to girl - If only one star would disappear everytime I remember you, I predict whole of the sky would be starless.
Music!
2006-08-12 02:09:53 · answer #5 · answered by ishaagarwall 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I would think what a long long long sentence.
Better use some interpunctions.
The content doesnt do much
these are cliches told a thousend times
only cheap girls fall for this
2006-08-12 02:06:01 · answer #6 · answered by gjmb1960 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I didn't understand anything, try to write what you really feel without exaggerating .
remember the most beautiful feelings come from the simplest words.
2006-08-12 02:18:04 · answer #7 · answered by soul 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
You may write to ME anytime!!! You are truly gifted.. both in this post and the post you wondered if you should send what you wrote to your crush...
2006-08-12 02:04:56 · answer #8 · answered by walkietalkiethree2003 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I'd complament you and say (you know your really talented ) you rock at writeing so i guess your a poet and you already now it (i think i'm funny)
2006-08-12 02:08:51 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
That's really beautiful; if it were written for me, I would know that I meant a lot to you and that you really cared!
2006-08-12 02:05:52 · answer #10 · answered by lilith4507 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Hmm..I'd crumple it up and throw it away.
Yay!! Two points for me as it falls in the trashcan!!
2006-08-12 23:29:47 · answer #11 · answered by mlove1307 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋