okay... people its a sensitive poem so please dont go sooo hard... I'm not William Shakespere!
I'm staring in the mirror at my own reflection,
But what I see I can't believe,
This person had no affection,
Man, I can't believe I let greed get the best of me.
And now I have no one to blame for my mistaked this time,
For I knew that outcome of my actions very well,
But yet I made decisions at the drop of a dime,
And where to go now I just cannot tell.
You were the apple of my, my best friend,
And I just don't know what to do without you here,
I just wish you would come home and let this nightmare end,
Your loss is more than I can bear.
I'm sorry I broke your heart with my spineless act,
And for all the nights you spent alone,
All the times you had to watch my back,
Venture in the night and almost never come home.
I wish the best for you and hope you find what your looking for,
May all your aspiring dreams come true,
I hope your heart insn't too sore,
And always remember... I LOVE YOU!
2006-08-11 11:53:14 · 5 answers · asked by ? 1 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
Tell me what u think!!!
2006-08-11 11:56:01 · update #1
Wow, you wrote that? You're a stranger and you made my heart melt... this must be for somebody really special. Good work!
2006-08-11 11:58:55 · answer #1 · answered by Flopsy 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
It's so cool that you are able to show your feelings and express yourself in that way, the poem certainly has not a good structure but you're doing very well.
Congratulations!! Although it's not a piece of art whomever you are going to give this poem to is going to melt.
2006-08-11 19:08:56 · answer #2 · answered by Houston 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
almost made me cry you made my heart melt well written indeed keep writing cus you are good you are awesome!!!
2006-08-13 12:53:49 · answer #3 · answered by gabryelle 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i think it was very sweet bout made me cry
2006-08-11 19:00:11 · answer #4 · answered by ann p 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
***This is very well written.
2006-08-11 19:01:29 · answer #5 · answered by UOPHXstudent 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋