What do you think its for a project.Rate out of 5 and why thankyou.=]
Mental Health
Mental health refers to the human’s individual Mind
It is an Emotional feeling deep inside
A state of emotions
A psychological well-being potion
That goes through your own mind
To his or her cognitive and emotional capabilities
That can show some of there real personalities
It is a function in society
That could be a whole anxiety
A psychological condition
That can be cured in any position
By ME!! =]
2006-08-10 23:00:41 · 27 answers · asked by Anonymous in Entertainment & Music ➔ Other - Entertainment
Plus Its projects on Mental Health =]
2006-08-10 23:07:01 · update #1
Im 13 not and adult just yet just started writing poetry. =]
2006-08-10 23:08:28 · update #2
Its my own poem ©
2006-08-10 23:21:14 · update #3
I'm 15, you're great at poetry compared to me.
Gosh this poem makes me crazy.
Try adding a one or two of a rhyme,
unless that is you don't have time.
All in all, I love this, it's ice cool.
Not like this poem, which is dull.
LOL ? <3.
2006-08-10 23:10:33 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
I'll give you a 4, good effort. For a 13 year old it is excellent.
My wife has a mental health problem and has the following up on the wall. She reads it when she feels low.
I am special. In the entire world there is nobody quite like me.
Since the beginning of time, there has never been another person like me. Nobody has my smile. Nobody has my eyes, my nose, my hair, my voice. I am special.
No one can be found who has my handwriting. Nobody anywhere has my tastes—– for food or music or art. No one sees things just as I do.
In all of time there has never been anyone who laughs like me. No one who cries like me. And what makes me laugh and cry will never provoke identical laughter and tears from anyone else ever.
No one reacts to any situation just as I would react. I am special.
I am the only one in all of creation who has my set of abilities. Oh there will always be somebody who is better at one of the things I am good at, but no one in the universe can reach the quality of my combinations of talents, ideas, abilities and feelings. Like a room full of musical instruments, some may excel alone, but no one can match the symphony sound when all are played together. I am a symphony.
Through all of eternity no one will ever walk, talk , think or act like me. I am special. I am rare and in rarity there is great value.
Because I am rare, I need not attempt to imitate others. I will accept and even celebrate my differences.
I am special and I am beginning to realise it is no accident. I am beginning to see that I was made special for a very special purpose. There must be a job for me that no one else can do as well as I. Out of all the billions of applicants, only one is qualified, only one has the right combination of what it takes.
That one is me. Because……..I am……….SPECIAL.
Anon
2006-08-10 23:17:56 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 1⤋
I must agree, it is a little too "clinical". Also, don't feel forced to rhyme for rhyme's sake in poetry. This came off as not flowing well... you start off not rhyming, then you do, then you don't, then you do for the last 3 sets...
Need to establish a good rhythem, whether or not you are rhyming. Poetry is like muscial words.
3/5
2006-08-10 23:08:26 · answer #3 · answered by Physh 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
This sounds to me more like a definition of mental health. It doesn't sound anything like a poem at all.
Rating: 2/5. Sorry.
2006-08-10 23:04:00 · answer #4 · answered by ♡ Choc ♡ 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Replace the line "that can show some of there real personalities" with "that can show some of their real personalities" and it works better. That is unless you are imposing a standard of split personality and they are in fact transposing a distinct personality to an area of space not occupied by their own physical being.
2006-08-10 23:10:33 · answer #5 · answered by Dustin S 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
For originality you probably score a high 4 then for ryhme 0 so the average is 2. Not bad thou there is enough room for improvement always make more!
2006-08-10 23:07:01 · answer #6 · answered by luvlacemike 1 · 1⤊ 0⤋
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2016-11-04 08:35:47 · answer #7 · answered by porterii 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Well, you asked to be honest, so I will. The poem is not good. The idea is good. You did a great thought analysis. But you did not conveyed it well, you did not expressed it well in words. You need experience, and you need training. The more you write, the better you will become.
2006-08-10 23:13:19 · answer #8 · answered by OC 7 · 1⤊ 1⤋
very creative and intelligent a 5 star for knowledge of your topic and
your creativity.
it is a poem in full form so if this were a case of fact vs. opinion fact would win.
2006-08-10 23:09:10 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
One out of Five...the only part I liked is the cured by any position part at the end....I think you were on to something there.
2006-08-10 23:08:35 · answer #10 · answered by the truth 1 · 1⤊ 0⤋