rate this poem one to ten please and tell me what you think?

Question

where are the free thinkers?
hexagon maze.
sage burning in autumn air.
crying into a styrofoam coffee cup.
shut up.
i want to squeeze your face hard.
sleeping with the end of me.
my heros choke on vomit.
i found this lamp of brass.
i polished it.
i made a wish but...
you're still here.
is my eye liner running?
plasma on my quilt.
spasms on my quill.
carnage on the page.
packs of **** eatin dogs.
hampster guts and tape worms.
sprawling like suburbia.
i find unwilling minds to occupy.
occupied minds unwiiling to find me.
signs to know your *** from your elbow.
shake the pin ball machine.
get the points.
stab an old woman with a screwdriver.
give a fat infant a shoe horn.
cream cheese and obesity cakes.
a sewer rat ate my cat.
i'd dye my hair but i have cancer.
i don't have hair.
being a burn victim seems luxurious.
can i have my enthusiasm back?
dude where is my cuntree?
these colors don't take kindly to coloreds.
fin.

Answer 1

ah, the smell of lice squads the half-baked politician his inorganic possibilities displayed all over forty-ninth street in an obvious bid for power 'A good name is as a precious ointment,' whereas Shakespeare says, 'What's in a name... etc...' Some people say, 'Name that tune'; but I say, 'Name your price.' "

Answer 2

I see imagery, but little Else, other than depressive cynicism. You mix metaphors so badly that your ideas have no impact, and this is because you haven't defined them for yourself. You're trying to shock with what you believe to be disgusting and terrible contrasts, but you fail because you don't have a clear idea about what your real message is, what you're trying to get people to see and feel, understand even. This is not poetry. It has no rhyme or meter, and you need to study poetry to understand what I'm talking about. You can't master anything you don't understand. You are far from mastery. You need to find someone who knows how to write poetry, a least understands it, and work with that person for a few years until you get an intellectual base to work from.

It's obvious that you are perceptive and sensitive, since I hear a voice crying out against all kinds of injustice and inhumanity in this work. You just need to understand that "poetry" is not something that one scribbles off from stream of consciousness. It is practiced, studied, and polished writing. Go to work on these and you will have a chance to achieve something.

Answer 3

I have read a few pomes in my life time but this one is so filled with sickness. I think you need to acually sit and read it your self it still needs lot's of work. I would give you a 2 . Fix it and maby I will change my mind.........

Answer 4

-25

Answer 5

A rating of one is being kind I'm sorry to say. Keep trying!

Answer 6

it was ssssssooooo boring i didnt want to read it but i read some and well IT SUCKS on a scale 1-10 its


-0.000

Answer 7

8

mainly because you didn't follow any poetry "rules," it's just freestyle. I love when poems are freestyle.

Answer 8

on a scale of one to ten?.......00

Answer 9

ew...0