As sadness comes and laughter goes
A fear wells up that no one knows
your gentle touch and loving kiss
there's nothing more that I shall miss
the sound of your voice,your breath apon my cheek
these are the things my heart will keep
a firey sunset , a thundering rain
the silence of the night will bring me pain
what I see and what I feel
with out you , wont seem real
winter, spring ,summer ,fall
each will pass, will I notice at all?
how will I return to life as before
I am not as the drift wood coming to shore
now that Ive loved you , I am not the same..
others will know me only by name
you'll take with you a peice of me
and carry it with you across the sea
know that I will be with you, wherever you rome
but I'll always be here
wanting you to come home.
2006-08-09 01:33:13 · 12 answers · asked by minx 3 in Family & Relationships ➔ Other - Family & Relationships
this poem is written about my true love having to return to the middle east.. I dont know when he will come back once he leaves...
2006-08-09 01:41:25 · update #1
(a few misspelled words) but other than that it has beautiful imagery and the rhythm follows perfect up until the last 3 lines
just combine the last 2 to create 1 line
(I'll always be here, wanting you to come home) and it's really great
isn't it great to express your feelings rather than keep them locked up? keep on writing, and I'll keep on reading..
thanks for sharing
2006-08-09 01:44:19 · answer #1 · answered by drgn grl 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
That is the most beautiful poem I've ever read and I have read a lot of poems by famous authors! You are a genius when it comes to writing poems. GREAT JOB!!!
2006-08-09 08:44:32 · answer #2 · answered by yoyo23123 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Gorgeous!
2006-08-09 08:35:49 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I sincerely think it is a very sweet poem.. if you liked writing it, try writing some more
2006-08-09 08:47:54 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Lovely poem. Very good and Creative use of words. I think he will love it.
2006-08-09 08:58:57 · answer #5 · answered by Ycul72 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Kinda mushy, but very sweet especially if it were written for you.
2006-08-09 09:01:59 · answer #6 · answered by Sassy OLD Broad 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
okay...is that bout a person you love and miss badly because the person is far away??? if so...that poem is for me as well.
2006-08-09 08:38:37 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like this one, nearly made me cry!
2006-08-09 09:03:12 · answer #8 · answered by H 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
it has a and b rhyme scheme.....are u hurt? where is she now? u must really miss this gal.....hmmmm.....send it to her.....
2006-08-09 08:45:34 · answer #9 · answered by narjhianne 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
its da lovliest poem someone can ever write.....its romantic,its great......publish it,girl!!!!!!
2006-08-09 08:39:55 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋