I don't consider myself a writer, but I do like to tell stories. So my friends suggest a while ago to join a writing site. (I posted two stories and haven't been back since) But now I'm revisiting something I wrote a while back. This scene just came into my head one day and now I'm trying to write a story around it. Please, tell me what you think of it and if you can help me with any ideas. (You don't have to give me story plots, just ideas on how I think of one) Please, no rude comments. Oh, and I know I probably have some grammar errors to it, so you don't have to mention that.
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2006-08-08 14:36:31 · 14 answers · asked by hpotter4ever2000 4 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
butterflys: the cake thing was meant to be an expression. Thanks for telling me that you didn't get it, I'll have to fix that.
2006-08-08 14:43:59 · update #1
Christina: I don't get your comment. I can handle advice, I just don't want people to be flat out mean about it.
2006-08-08 14:45:17 · update #2
well for starters, you had my attention, coz i was intrigued about what the hell was going on...that's a good thing-coz you want ur reader to keep reading, turning pages...i think it's got potential-now what you can ask urself about this scene b/w the two: how are these ppl connected? how did she end up aiming a gun at him? why is she so cynical in her view of the world: ie, the whole idea of why the world is so screwed up yet we all are aiming for the same notions, yet call them fame, power, prestige? how did this guy get involved with her? you can build the story in a one day event-they are heading back to the inn...does she confess about something that happened to her and thus, she feels the way she does? is he hiding from the feds/police? is she hiding from them? you can do so much with this little piece here...draw ideas from the news, and build from there-good luck!
2006-08-08 14:47:44 · answer #1 · answered by ria k 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
If you are a true writer then the idea has to be your own. Maybe I can tell you that I have been published before and that writing is hard work. I really got most of my ideas when I was sitting in the wild somewhere. I use to go to the mountains in California. If you have a good imagination then you just have to start writing. It is that simple. Write down things that don't make sense to you. Some day it might. I don't review other writers because I don't want to get their ideas in my head. Good Luck. I am not a professional writer. I am a vet tech. I couldn't earn enough money as a writer.
2006-08-08 14:44:37 · answer #2 · answered by angelsforanimals 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
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2016-08-28 10:37:15 · answer #3 · answered by dassler 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think you could have a talent worth developing. I'm not sure of your age, but do feel a little less of the 4 letter words would have just as much impack on the reader as your details and color in the story.
2006-08-08 14:45:56 · answer #4 · answered by Mudder/ Gi 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I thought it was great and Don't change the cake thing I get it. You are saying why start the job of killing him if you aren't going to finish it sort of like why cut the cake a start eating if you aren't going to finish. I think it is a great play on words that causes you to think.
2006-08-09 01:13:13 · answer #5 · answered by mountaincutie1178 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It gave me sort of an X-files feel to it. I'd say it's a sci-fi genra type story.
I was like you many years ago, I liked to create stories but never concidered myself a writer.
You should add more, like convert it into a short story, with a beginning, middle and end.
2006-08-08 19:32:28 · answer #6 · answered by ? 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
You may just try forming your own question about it, then turn off your computer moniter (keeping the computer itself on) and just free write anything that comes to mind for about 15 minutes. You may come up with some great ideas.
2006-08-08 15:03:27 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
The conversation doesn't flow smoothly. The girl talks too much without sounding like a regular person but I like it. I think you could do much with this (after you REALLY revised it, of course).
I can help you but you have to message me first. (Oh, the sins I've commited! :P)
2006-08-08 14:43:42 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very interesting! Keep up the good work!
2006-08-08 14:42:03 · answer #9 · answered by kepjr100 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it...keep it up and work hard. i want to see the finished thing
2006-08-08 14:40:43 · answer #10 · answered by Rock_N_Roll_Chicky 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋