I hope you share my pride in what we have accomplished in a fairly short time. vs I hope you share my pride in what we have accomplished in a fairly short period of time.
Can both of these sentences work the way they are written? I know the second one is tighter, but I am being told I am wrong that the 1st sentence can not be used that way and be correct.
2006-08-08 04:13:30 · 10 answers · asked by maine_eggs77 1 in Education & Reference ➔ Words & Wordplay
The problem here is that responders are going for the "grand" and "sophisticated" rather than for simple, clear communication.
"A short time" is all that is needed. "Period of" is redundant and unnecessary and merely makes the speaker/writer sound pompous.
Another common example is "at this point in time." The phrase "in time" is again redundant; the same is true of "round in shape" or "black in color." I'd call it "language inflation." Avoid it!
2006-08-08 09:49:01 · answer #1 · answered by keepsondancing 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
The difference between these two sentences 'We have accomplished in a fairly short time' and 'We have accomplished in a fairly short period of time' lies in their stylistic values. The first sentence is less formal than the second one. The second sentence is stylistically consistent as the verb 'accomplish' and the group of words 'a fairly short period of time' are slightly 'formal' in nature. To make the first sentence stylistically consitent you may use the verb 'achieve' instead of 'accomplish'.
2006-08-08 11:38:43 · answer #2 · answered by asok c 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
You cannot talk about my and we in the same sentence, so they are both WRONG! It should be, I hope you share OUR pride in what we have accomplished or I hope you share my pride in what I have accomplished.
Jules, Australia.
2006-08-08 12:17:14 · answer #3 · answered by Jules G 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think the second on sounds more grammatically correct
2006-08-08 11:20:43 · answer #4 · answered by Prickly P 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think they both work, grammatically speaking, but the second one sounds grander and is better balanced.
2006-08-08 11:19:50 · answer #5 · answered by mad 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
They are both grammatically correct and identical in meaning.
2006-08-08 11:39:15 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
They are both correct. Tell them to trust me--I grade grammar for state standardized tests.
2006-08-08 11:20:20 · answer #7 · answered by cross-stitch kelly 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
They're both gramatically correct, however the second is more sophisticated sounding.
2006-08-08 12:01:46 · answer #8 · answered by smartee 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
both are grammatically correct; the "short time" may stand alone.
2006-08-08 11:44:12 · answer #9 · answered by barbsmonsta 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
they both can be used, but number 2 sounds more formal and grand.
2006-08-08 11:22:27 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋