what am i afraid of?
afraid of dying
afraid of losing someone i love
i'm afraid of God above
afraid to try
afraid i'll let life pass me by
afraid of war
afraid i'll fail like before
afraid my family wont know how i feel
afraid i wont meet God's will
afraid of being hurt
afraid my llife i will subvert
afraid i wont be a good mother
afraid my children will wish they had another
afraid of growing old
afraid my burdens are to heavy a load
afraid no one knows the real me
afraid they will never see
afraid of being a bad wife
I'M AFRAID OF LIFE!
2006-08-07 08:04:31 · 7 answers · asked by dawn 2 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
lol will i was depressed when i wrote it
2006-08-07 08:11:09 · update #1
Very Nice ! Needs just a bit of revising other wise quite good ! Nice Expression Lady !
Take care and God Bless you !
2006-08-07 09:25:22 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 4⤊ 0⤋
I like the honesty in your poem.
I suspect you posted it here because you needed to say it but didn't want family or friends to see it.
Putting things like that into words can be therapeutic.
It is impossible to address a problem that isn't defined.
By writing this poem you have defined your fears.
Now get angry, get determined and start resolving those fears one at a time.
Good luck baby.....................
2006-08-08 01:24:33 · answer #2 · answered by Harley Charley 5 · 2⤊ 0⤋
Take out the afraids in the begining of each line and loose the i'm in the fourth line...
2006-08-07 15:12:14 · answer #3 · answered by Sammi 2 · 2⤊ 0⤋
yeah, it's kind of deep... but there are too many "afraid's", I would eliminate some of them, like one sentence with an "afraid" and the next one without it. However, you express yourself in a great way!
2006-08-07 15:14:50 · answer #4 · answered by ladybug_abyta 2 · 2⤊ 0⤋
It is a good poem, I guess. Might need a few edits, but otherwise, I like it!
2006-08-07 16:26:25 · answer #5 · answered by ♥Just Another Broken Heart♥ 4 · 2⤊ 0⤋
It's a very deep poem. I LOVE IT! Its very understanding and full of confessions.
2006-08-07 15:10:26 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 0⤋
blah blah blah... kind of boring...
2006-08-07 15:09:30 · answer #7 · answered by ksgirl 4 · 0⤊ 2⤋