i made a 2 line poem . tell me what you think it means.?

Question

i made a 2 line poem . tell me what you think it means.?
intense were the moments when the sun reappeared
it cast away the shadows that encompassed our tears
( i am in grade 9 , is this of my level )
WOW . i did not know it was that good . i am 13 . and i made this up while playing soccer with my friends .
. i did not have any depression when i was young my life would have been titled a flawless dream if published so i really dont know where the essence of it comes from (never experienced hardships)

Answer 1

Obviously you have the makings of a fine writer. Most writers (including myself) will tell you that their best stuff just "comes to" them when doing other things, less often when they are bent over a keyboard trying to think of something to write.
Don't listen to anyone who might tell you that you can't do this professionally. When I was 13 someone told me there is no such thing as a professional poet. That's crap. If you have passion and talent you can do whatever you want.
I like the poem but I think you should take it further and see where it goes.

Answer 2

Well it's not really about being depressed is it? It's about getting rid of depression. It is good for your level, try writing two more lines, then another two, etc. Poetry is a demonstrative art, not an explanatory or didactic form, so you have to practise to get the perfect incarnation out of the words. Also, remember that it is really easy to write (bad) free verse, which is why everyone does it. Try following the rules of rhyme and meter - and if you do something good then, you'll know you've really got something good on your hands. In any artistic endeavour, artists are trained to a high degree of standards of control (think for example of ballet dancers), before they're let loose to do what they want. If more people had to learn the discipline first, there would be a lot less bad poetry in the world. So check it out, and write another two lines.

Answer 3

Ignore Tom C. Your poem was good. It sounds like seeing something good that washes out bad things around you, things that made you sad, but now you are happy because of this good thing that came, whatever it is.
If you have depression now, it's just a phase, but it could be that you are somewhat unhappy with a perfect life. As bad as hardship is, it also brings good. I'm not saying to go look for hardship. Enjoy the good things you have, and expand that poem. There is probably a lot more where that came from.

Answer 4

This poem however short is about human condition. The mood is that is exhilaration and optimism as tears can also come when one is unexpectedly happy. The coming of the Sun upon a distant horizon is the most potent symbol in the poem. It is about a dramatic change, in which hope, patience and endurance of human spirit finally prevail upon the forces of darkness. And as goodness in human nature prevails and a new dawn, and a new life begins tears of happiness come and join with the tears of nightly sorrow, purity, piety, and compassion as their reward and then ‘shadows encompassing’ them are dispelled.


Human tears are also a symbol of purity, piety and patience – like the melting wax of a candle that burns during the night until it is dawn - life is like a gradual spreading of the light of human courage, hope and fairness.

Keep writing, and writing!

Answer 5

'Our tears' ? Are you sure you don't mean 'my tears' ? This poem is about you so only you can write it. I suspect you 'dried up' out of fear of continuing afraid of what you were touching inside of yourself and where you might go with it and so you took it out of your heart and put it into your head, get back to the heart. Yes it is a good start but it doesn't matter whether anyone else thinks the poem is any good or not, it's your poem

Answer 6

to me it means something has upset you, brought a darkness, a heartache to your life and the sun appearing just helps to take the edge off, to know that there is light after the darkness and things will get better with time. just as a little time brought the light after the dark...even if its not about your life at the moment. but just remember if things do get depressing just think back to those 2 lines. i think its great keep it up.

Answer 7

At 13 i couldnt right like that! Best of luck with your SAT's and GCSE's if you have that writing ability i think you could go far!!
Try and extend it!! id love to hear a fuller version!!

Answer 8

Total eclipse of the sun

Answer 9

Keep going with your poems maybe you'll be famous one day good luck in life

Answer 10

its good carry on writing maybe you have seen someone go through bad times and come out the other end smiling