You Inspire Me To Be Me
My Heart Wants To Be free
Will You Embrace The Love I Have For You
All I Need is You By My Side
Wanting Me , Holding Me , Giving Me Exactly What I Need
I'm Holding On Tight To Our Love
Never letting Go Of This Feeling So True
You Inspire Me To Love You
These Words I Speak Means The World To Me
My Heart Wants To Free
Loving You Is All I Need
You Inspire Me
2006-08-05 18:35:04 · 32 answers · asked by Alsgrl 1 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
Learn Guitar! This needs chords. Theres a 70s song that comes to mind concerning you, "got the music in me". You got the lyrics, get the music. I know you got it in you.
2006-08-05 18:41:53 · answer #1 · answered by Stratobratster 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
well alsgrl, I think your poem is good; it comes from your heart. However, may I suggest a few changes?
Omit the the last two words in lines 3 and 6 and in line 8 the last word.
When I read it that way I felt a shared experience with you but one that came from my own experienced of having loved another. Love seems to be the most misinterpreted emotion humans have. As important as this human emotion is to one's mental health it is often abused. Like a double edged sword, it can do as much damage as it does good. But really, love is the first step one takes out of the safety of the familiarity provided by mom and dad towards developing an environment that one can develop a familiarity with so, one must be aware that the contribution to developing that environment will come from two people with different familiarities. How one interprets or expresses love will be quite different from someone else. Which is why I suggest that the poem be less direct, more abstract. Like a nice gift wrapped in a pretty package.
2006-08-05 20:05:19 · answer #2 · answered by halpal22 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
First off, take it to a record-exec and I'm sure you'll get the response you need to hear. Secondly, poetry.com is a business ploy to make generic collections of poems into books you won't want to show your grandkids once you've found out you were duped out of $100. Sorry folks, the reality of social approval (especially on the internet) is that it does not usually equate into individual success. Now, the alternative to all this discouraging rhetoric is that if you keep working, meaning working for the rest of your life, what I just said will make sense and you'll be able to laugh at this critique later on; that's f****ng passion.
2006-08-05 20:08:36 · answer #3 · answered by silas h 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
well it is inspirational... kinda stalkerish... a great book to read on how to find ur artistic inspiration is "the demon and the angel" its a whole book on how amazing poets and writers found their inspirations on their greatest work. i think if u really focus on it ur talent will truly shine!
2006-08-05 18:40:23 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Vapid. Boring.
2006-08-05 18:39:19 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I agree, it must be a song :)
do you have it in song?
hmm... "you inspire me to be me"
I think this line is very interesting, though there many "be yourself" you chose to use "you inspire me to be me" :)
but girl, Love is not mean to be free.
Love is commitment, and commitment is never free.
so, you must choose one of them :)
free, or be loved :)
bless you
2006-08-05 19:43:16 · answer #6 · answered by wilsonboncu 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Yeah sounds like a good song.!
2006-08-05 18:38:20 · answer #7 · answered by Muslim 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It sounds like it should be the lyrics to a song.
2006-08-05 18:37:19 · answer #8 · answered by dropkickchick 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I am touched.
Inappropriately
By you
I was caught
Unaware
By your words.
Which laid me
Bare like a rug
On the floor
Calling the cops
You are busted.
2006-08-05 18:42:01 · answer #9 · answered by Just Ask 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
kind of mundane. sounds like the lyrics to a song or something. not a poem. not bad though.
2006-08-05 18:39:51 · answer #10 · answered by Bistro 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋