I saw a shadow rat last night/
he crawled into my soul
he tried to eat my loving sins
but fell into my hole
the voids within are always hungry
and what it marks it eats
ill come to visit you one night
while you are trying to sleep
i hope you like it ~~just a little nugget of joy
2006-08-04 17:57:48 · 14 answers · asked by darkangel1111 5 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
one day i was just overwhelmed with happiness and connectedness that we all have with "living things" its just that the living things i like are usually dead~~~
2006-08-04 17:59:08 · update #1
thankz all< ill let my sidekick darven know ya'all liked it~comes dtraight from a veru hot place~nestled deep within my coconut trees in muh backyard
2006-08-04 18:17:25 · update #2
Its wonderful.
I love poetry. I would love to hear some more that you wrote. If you have any you want to share email me. wannarace928@yahoo.com
2006-08-04 18:02:04 · answer #1 · answered by wannarace928 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Too light and cheery. Work on it. Think Edgar Allen Poe meets Steven King.
2006-08-05 01:03:00 · answer #2 · answered by sparkletina 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I hope I never meet a shadow rat. So did you eat the rat? Are you going to eat me? I don't really get it. It scares me. I don't like wormy rat tails.
2006-08-05 01:02:04 · answer #3 · answered by Melisma 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Poetry is the 2nd best form of emotions in the world. Music is 1st.. I didn't get the poem.
2006-08-05 16:17:08 · answer #4 · answered by Chels 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
This is very funny and it did make me laugh. A shadow rat, thats where I started cracking up.
2006-08-05 01:02:50 · answer #5 · answered by Zeta 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
keep the writing up....poetry is such a creative way to say things and people hate it so much these days
2006-08-05 01:02:32 · answer #6 · answered by hambone1985 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it, I love all types of poetry.
2006-08-05 01:06:50 · answer #7 · answered by Nico 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
the last part kinda didnt work but the rest was good!
2006-08-05 12:46:39 · answer #8 · answered by Leroy 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Wow, I feel like I have to go to church!
2006-08-05 01:08:03 · answer #9 · answered by Jacob B 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's dark and disturbing ... I like it!
2006-08-05 01:02:52 · answer #10 · answered by ♀♥♂☮Trippy Hippie☮♂♥♀ 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋