Can you please check my grammar in these sentences?

Question

If you have any comment or suggestion to make these sentences better, please feel free to do it.
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On July 31st, while completing a presentation on how to write an application letter, I discussed the purpose, need, and proper methods for composing an effective application letter.

In the presentation, I provided three easy steps, the ABC method, to compose an application letter such as addressing and opening, body, and closing.

In addition, I also provided some convenient methods for writing an effective application letter such as the online tools of hotjobs.com and monster.com.

I also organized my presentation very well, giving a lot of good examples on how to write an effective application letter, categorizing three easy steps to write a cover letter, including all the detailed information of how to compose an application letter.

Answer 1

Not too bad - but stay away from one-sentence paragraphs. Added some clarity below - but very minor.


On July 31st, while completing a presentation on how to write an application letter, I discussed the purpose, need, and proper methods for composing an effective application letter.

In the presentation, I provided three easy steps, the “ABC” method, to compose an application letter, such as addressing and opening, body, and closing.

In addition, I also provided some convenient methods for writing an effective application letter such as the online tools found at hotjobs.com and monster.com.

I also organized my presentation very well, giving a lot of good examples on how to write an effective application letter, categorizing three easy steps to write a cover letter, and included all the detailed information of how to compose an application letter.

Answer 2

On July 31,2006 I discussed the purpose, need, and proper methods for composing an effective application letter. My presentation included three easy steps, the ABC method, which describes the address, opening, body, and the closing. I also provided convenient aides such as the online tools of hotjobs.com and monster.com. My well organized presentation gave examples, detailed steps, how to write a cover letter and was short and precise. Best wishes! You were repetitive and used I too much. Was there a reason for all of the short paragraghs?

Answer 3

The first one looks good to me.

Okay, in the second, I think it should be....

"In the presentation, I provided three easy steps; the ABC method, to compose an application letter, with instructions on addressing and composing the opening, body, and closing of the letter.

The third may be better as...

"In addition, I provided convenient methods for writing an effective application letter for the online tools of "www.hotjobs.com" and "www.monster.com".

The fourth might be better as...

"I also organized my presentation very well, being sure to give many good examples on how to write an effective application letter, catagorizing three easy steps for writing a cover letter, and including all of the detailed information on how to compose an application letter."

These are mearly suggestions. I hope I helped jog your mind a little. :-)

Answer 4

I'm now not absolutely definite what you're seeking to say, however "ethos" a greek phrase that's not often utilized by steady individuals in English, and it approach individual. So I feel what you're seeking to say is: He has individual (ethos) by means of persuading others and by means of constructing typical floor. But that does not make so much experience in English; we would not relatively describe it that manner, so some thing have got to be misplaced in translation. If you desire to check out to mention it in an extra manner, I'll come again and edit this to aid you!

Answer 5

There is nothing wrong with your grammar but you string a lot of phrases into one sentence using commas. It would make for easier reading if you would make shorter sentences.

Answer 6

They all look just fine to me.

Answer 7

very good