rate this poem from one to ten?

Question

charles mingus was an uncle tom.
i wish elvis would've died sooner.
draw a circle with chalk,stand in the center,and shut the f*ck up!
you and i would feel better if your face was on fire.
i may as well be from pluto because intelect is alien here.
your faux scholarly ways are a painful joke to me.
you make me laugh so hard i lose grasp on my sanity temporarily.
praying for someone to murder kayne west and destroy MTV.
video killed my ambition to seek worthwhile works of art.
i saw a new coke commercial starring jesus christ and whats her name.
i have an inflatable pool in my living room in front of the television.
i masturbate and eat hot pockets filled with broccoli and hatred.
i need medication to do anything human so the world doesnt stare at my weakness.
i have an extensive collection of gap brand turtle necks and wicker flip flops.
kurt cobain's greatest accomplishment was the painting he made with his brains and fragments of his skull.
you should work that hard.

capitalization is for chi-chi-men. and your existance makes me want to cry. look up the definition for NIHILISM and tell me to be more organized.

just so you all know a poem BY DEFINITION is anything that a poet writes and calls a poem. this work is obviously completely un-serious however i am a poet in reality and if i call it a POEM then it is a POEM. case closed.

Answer 1

its horrible. i was gonna say it was a lil creative on the weird side at first but then u dissed kanye. i stopped reading after that.

Answer 2

I give it 7 1/2. I have cut 1/2 mark for using swear words. !/2 mark cause there's no rhyme scheme, 1/2 mark cause it isn't in paras ( it would look better if it was in paragraphs ) and 1 mark because you did hurt a few people's feeling.
No offence meant whatsoever. It was my judgement.

However i give you full marks for creativity. No one else would think of making a cool poem like this.

If you reduce the swear words and neatly align, then get it published or else write a book of poems. You've got potential. Improve on that.

Answer 3

for some reason doesn't seem very poem-y to me. What kind o format are you following, if any? seems more like prose, although the line is blurry. As to content.... well, it's fairly negative, but if that's the way you feel, then it's good that your expressing it instead of making the newspapers by being involved in a school shooting staring you as the gun-wielding lunatic.

Answer 4

-10

Answer 5

LOL that's hilarious.. I can't rate it ~ I'm sorry.
Also it comes off more as a rant then a poem and yes there is a difference.
It wasn't that bad. I kinda like it ;)

Answer 6

I would give it a 3 for artistic expression but it sounds like you have a lot of misplaced aggression.

Answer 7

First 9 lines are pretty cool.

The rest...meh was a bit distorted.

7.

Answer 8

9 and a half....but the fact that you mentioned about Jesus in a commercial...it's down to MINUS 9 and a half!

Answer 9

Just what the world needs...the rantings of a bitter curmudgeon. I give it a zero.

Answer 10

i'm not saying i like it or don't like it. it's very dark and harsh. it also i feel scars the reality around us, very much like a monologue of the pain of a material- restricted world. very advant-Garde i write poetry also, mine is quite emotional but not as dark as yours. i won't judge yours.