please check my grammar here?

Question

I am doing a self evaluation on my presentation that i did last week.

please check my grammar here. If you have any suggestion to make these sentences better, please feel free to comment.
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Having a smile on my face, dressing formally, I have done a great job on my presentation.

My visual aids were attractive and easily readable because the presentation included art, graphics, photos and a fancy template to illustrate ideas.

I also organized my presentation very well, giving a lot of good examples on how to write an application, categorizing three steps to write an application letter, including all the information of how to write an application letter.

However, I was little too nervous in the beginning when I was delivering the presentation.

The butterflies suddenly fly into my stomach.

I had a stomachache; the stomachache happened every time during the presentation.
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thank you very much for checking the sentences.

Answer 1

While smiling and wearing formal dress, I did a great job on my presentation

My visual aids were attractive and easily readable because the presentation included art, graphics, photos and a fancy template to illustrate ideas.

I also organized my presentation very well, giving a lot of good examples on how to write an application, categorizing three steps to write an application letter, and including all the information of how to write an application letter.

However, I was a little too nervous while I was beginning the delivery of my presentation.

The butterflies suddenly flew into my stomach.

I had a stomachache, which happens every time I deliver a presentation.


I'm no English major, but this is how I would rewrite them, just to correct the tenses of some things, and to make it a bit more readable. Hope this helps!

Answer 2

i have edited it a bit.hope you do not mind.

Dressed formally and with a smile on my face, I did a great job on my presentation.
The presentation had included art, graphics, photos and a fancy template to illustrate ideas.
The visual aids were attractive and easily readable.

I had organised my presentation very well, giving many good examples on how to write an application letter, including all the information and categorising the three steps.

However, I was a little too nervous in the beginning when I was delivering the presentation.

The butterflies had suddenly flown into my stomach.

I had a stomachache; but then the stomachache happened every time I gave a presentation!!!!!!!!!

Answer 3

Dressed formally I did a great presentation with a smile on my face.

My visual aids were catchy and comprehensible since the presentation included art, graphics, photos and a fancy template to illustrate ideas.

I also organized my presentation very well. I gave a lot of good examples on how to write
(a) an application
(b) an application letter

However, I was a bit nervous in the beginning when I was delivering the presentation. I felt butterflies in my stomach. I must admit, I had a stomach ache. For some reason, I suffer from stomach ache every time I present !

Answer 4

I was dressed formally with a smile on my face. I did a great job on my presentation.

My visual aids were attactive and easily readable; the presentation icluded: art, graphics, photos, and a fancy template to illustrate ideas.

Also, I organized my presentation very well. I gave a lot of good examples on how to write an application and I categorized them into three steps for writing an application letter.

However, I was a little too nervous in the beginning of my presentation. I suddenly had butterflies in my stomache. which caused me to get a stomache ache. I get a stomache ache every time I give a presentation.

Answer 5

You forgot the "a" in I was little too nervous.

Answer 6

problematic step. query on google or bing. it can assist!

Answer 7

is this a trick question? looks good to me.