Written by: me
To be or not to be: that is the question
This life is a bliss that it looks like a big circus
You have to make choices cuz everyday you have troubles
Some choices may do well to you
And some may hurt you
But you make choice by your own will
And that makes you what you are and the way you want to be
Cuz That’s when you decide to be or not to be
There will be frustration
And there will be lot of pressure
But you will get through it because it is a life circle
In this life circle there is lots choices
And one of them is to be or not to be
Some times in our life we walk the line
But there are still lots of questions in your mind
There are some questions that you can’t answer
But you have to find the answer to this question
That is to be or not to be
I think I got the question
And I have made my choice to be what I want to be
But now it’s your turn to
Make the choice about the question
TO BE OR NOT TO BE!
2006-08-03 11:03:12 · 17 answers · asked by Kush 2 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
It's fantastic. That poem is just so darn good. You are my literary hero now. Please let me worship at the feet of the great lyrical master.
Can I have the top answer, please?
2006-08-03 11:08:00 · answer #1 · answered by Sean R 3 · 1⤊ 4⤋
Keep trying! The part about questioning yourself and making good choices is good but your repeated it too many times and it rambles along after that. Bliss means tranquil happiness. Did you mean that life is peaceful but looks like a circus, that you can make good choices in this crazy world and still have tanquility? Cuz is slang and really stands out in this poem that has a more serious tone. I wrote one a bit like it when I was younger. It was about the 2 sides of me and which would I ultimatley be. Work on your English,grammar, and look up words to make sure of their meanings. Keep thinking!
2006-08-03 18:18:34 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Sounds like your well on your way through self discovery.
I would advise you to not look to others about how they feel about your inner feelings. Stay true to yourself, if what you write pleases you and feels right that's all you need to know.
Poetry is about self expression. If other people get it that's because they have had similar feelings, thoughts or experience with what you wrote. The only bad poetry is written about things that have nothing to do with the writer.
So if this poem truly reflects you and not someone else then it's good poetry.
Keep delving and you'll do even more to be proud of.
2006-08-03 18:54:34 · answer #3 · answered by Michael G 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
At first, I was confused. Then I thought you were suggesting that life is confusing and the poem was intentionally evoking confusion. Then the poem ends with an assertion that you are not confused, rather you have life figured out. Then you have the audicity to suggest that I need to figure out my life. Pretty condescending from a writer who exudes confusion.
Upon second reading I think I understand your point: life is full of decisions and the choices we make define who we are to be. Its a good theme, but the development of the ideal is confusing.
2006-08-03 18:25:38 · answer #4 · answered by tke999 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
You've got to elaborate on your main theme of To Be Or Not To Be because you are quoting Hamlet when he was deciding whether to expose the newly crowned king -of murder--
and thereby set himself up for the same scenario.
WE --normal everyday people not including Hamlet_-- actually do Not have a choice. We will Be ! It is WHAT we will be--THAT is the question ! to Be Happy instead of unHappy. to be Excellent instead of Avreage THAT is the question ! IT IS ALSO the answer !
2006-08-03 18:14:14 · answer #5 · answered by goodcharacter 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
On a scale of 1-10
1-very bad that you should delete this question
10-enter it into a contest and see of you win
I would rate it to be a seven!!
2006-08-03 18:09:13 · answer #6 · answered by SwEeT-As-cAnDy 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I'm guessing English is your second language, so, good for you to express yourself on this level. The poem itself needs a lot of work, but I applaud the work you are doing on yourself, and the courage you have to let the world see your growing pains and your strengths.
2006-08-03 18:14:50 · answer #7 · answered by Helga J 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Well, it doesn't meet academic standards, but I'm sure it has potential in a less rigid environment. Your word usage is poor and the use of slang really dumbs it up. Best!
2006-08-03 18:25:05 · answer #8 · answered by Answer 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think another author beat you to the punch with the "TO BE OR NOT TO BE!" I might be mistaken. Be more original and don't give up writing. Eventually you will get better, hopefully.
2006-08-03 18:10:38 · answer #9 · answered by Falcon Boy Toy 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
To be honest it needs work. I like the topic about how our choices affect our life and define who we are. What I don't like is that it rambles. It needs to be pared down and refined.
2006-08-03 18:23:31 · answer #10 · answered by Mollywobbles 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's ok, but a little repetitive with the to be or not to be, that would pass in a song, but not as well in a poem...
2006-08-03 18:07:31 · answer #11 · answered by Gothica 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋