My Way
If I had it my way, no one would get hurt.
Everyone would be happy. It would be ok to flirt.
Breakups would be easy, no name-calling and such.
A lot more "I love you's", and less "I hate you so much"!
We need to take gentle care, of how our feelings are spread.
For if we are not careful, we can snap that tiny thread.
Telling people how you feel works better in the end.
You won't feel so bloated, if you tell that special friend.
Take that giant leap, into that world unknown.
You might gain a seed of love, from which life will grow.
If you waste too much time, to tell someone you care,
that chance may never come again, to send your voice into the air.
We get too old, way too fast, and life gets complicated.
If you didn't tell that person, you'll wish you never waited.
So do it my way.
Gillian Moore
2006-08-03 09:53:33 · 7 answers · asked by ? 2 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
i don't know what other people think of it but i think your poem was the bomb. and i would give it a 20. that was great and this is coming from a person who love to read poems.
2006-08-03 10:31:23 · answer #1 · answered by sexybabygirl 1 · 5⤊ 1⤋
7
2006-08-03 17:17:27 · answer #2 · answered by badonggi 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It starts off okay, but I think you could find a better word than bloated - it doesn't really work. I didn't like the use of grow to rhyme with unknown either. Needs more work, but not a bad first effort.
6/10
2006-08-03 17:18:39 · answer #3 · answered by Hainer 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
9/10
2006-08-03 17:00:15 · answer #4 · answered by angelus 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
7/10 mOST OF it didnt sound like it came from your heart! some of it did! great poem though!
2006-08-03 17:11:41 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
good poem=8
2006-08-03 17:04:28 · answer #6 · answered by classic_tigger 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
ummmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm? 2 long
2006-08-03 16:59:20 · answer #7 · answered by Iseeme(: 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋