please rate this poem one to ten? here's a real one since you don't vibe on the nihilism rants.titled-Absinth

Question

i heard of a black-hole where if you stare at it long enough you see the face of god.
it has been mystically referred to as your reflection.
i stand at the alter of truth inside of a chapel filled to the brim with deceit.
i await my marriage to conveinence and war.
a wise man once said that he should have never uttered a single phrase.
i dream that i might teach my children the same.
what harm would it do to let a child name him/herself if they felt the need to be labeled?
i bought a wilted soul for the lapel of orions jacket not knowing it's summer in space.
sumer and sage brush burns fueled with tablets from an age of snake plagues.
bearenstein bears biblical babble battle babylon.
i litter alliterations and scream thoroughly at the def in attempts to initiate decadent cohesion.
these ear canals are banal with gondola rides to the temple.
masked in stars and stripes and scars and tripe and sars and slight totalitarian bliss.
i need absence of time to sleep walk it off.

yeah it's still the same ol' jibber jabber.

Answer 1

OMG! My brain so hurts right now!!

Answer 2

5

Answer 3

4 it's all over the place. I'm not sure what story your trying to tell or what your point is. Keep writing though, you've got some good use of language it's just infrequent. It feels too forced.

Answer 4

good grief. I rate it a 1

Answer 5

i'm sorry. i hate it. it doesn't flow AT ALL! it seems like you are trying to cram as many 'big words' into your poem as possible, just to seem smart. and it comes off stupid. no offense, of course.

one.

Answer 6

8. im not into poetry tho

Answer 7

7 it was pretty good

Answer 8

dude, i lost interest in the first few bars.....it sucked...