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Yeah, i wrote this one while on the balcony one foggy spring morning. I felt the love, the passion as i imagined i was on the balcony on the set on Romeo and Juliet. The words poured out of me like a river unstopped. Anyway, here it is.

Beautiful dreamer, wake unto me,
Starlight and dewdrops are waiting for thee;
Sounds of the rude world heard in the day,
Lull'd by the moonlight have all pass'd a way!

Beautiful dreamer, queen of my song,
List while I woo thee with soft melody;
Gone are the cares of life's busy throng, --
Beautiful dreamer, awake unto me!

Beautiful dreamer, out on the sea
Mermaids are chaunting the wild lorelie;
Over the streamlet vapors are borne,
Waiting to fade at the bright coming morn.

Beautiful dreamer, beam on my heart,
E'en as the morn on the streamlet and sea;
Then will all clouds of sorrow depart, --
Beautiful dreamer, awake unto me!

Rate from 1-10. Be kind please. Good ratings get you a free pass to a second poem

2006-08-02 13:55:59 · 17 answers · asked by Anonymous in Entertainment & Music Polls & Surveys

17 answers

6

2006-08-02 13:59:51 · answer #1 · answered by Angel_Anton 6 · 0 2

10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10



VERY NICE POEM

I LOVE IT

2006-08-02 21:00:27 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 1 0

8

2006-08-02 21:01:05 · answer #3 · answered by Jessica 2 · 0 0

first of all don't be so sappy you give poets a bad rep with the rest of the world when you present yourself as a muse from the 1600's. secondly your diction and flow are expertly crafted but the subject matter of your poem is unclear and takes away from the overall value of the read. the song like flow would lead the reader to believe it's about a flittering romance but the diction in places would seem to suggest an escape from reality and the harshness of it all. while its easy to rewad and your diction is consistent it should be a bit more clear what your focus actually is. ambiguity is good as long as the reader can ultimately make a conclusion as to what you're talking about. good work though.

2006-08-02 21:06:04 · answer #4 · answered by Kevin 2 · 0 0

That was a totally awesome poem. You rate a 10. You are a very talented person and I sure hope that you continue to write. You definitely have the gift of an artist.

2006-08-02 21:29:11 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0 0

Beautifully put. 9 1/2,oh want the heck 10

2006-08-02 21:02:59 · answer #6 · answered by Willnotlietoyou 5 · 0 0

THAT'S NOT YOUR POEM!
That's the song "Beautiful Dreamer" written by Stephen Collins Foster in 1864.
You're scantless and I can't believe no one has recognized the song!

2006-08-02 21:05:07 · answer #7 · answered by anonymous 6 · 2 0

7 And A Half

2006-08-02 21:00:06 · answer #8 · answered by nicnoo23 4 · 0 0

It is a song written about 1 hundred years ago you ***.

All of the rest of you are illiterate cretins for not recognizing it

2006-08-02 21:10:18 · answer #9 · answered by TheDoctor 6 · 1 0

I'm going to say 9 because I like it but it sounds kind of familiar.

2006-08-02 21:08:48 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0 0

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