Loud
Cackling of crows
Proudly remorseful
Mourning the spilling of emotions
At the edge of the sea of tears
Softly
Whistling of the wind
Carrying hope between the clouds
At the edge of the sea of tears
Subtle
Whispering be strong beneath the winds whistle
Forgotten because of the crow cackle
At the edge of the sea of tears
Sound no more
But was not the case when betrayal was found
At the edge...
It fell, my broken heart made the sea of tears
August 2006
J.C. Horton
2006-08-02 13:53:06 · 24 answers · asked by Atypical Marvel 2 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
I loved it. I find writing poetry helps resolve emotionally stressful situations. Have you ever visited or submitted to http://www.poetry.com ? I encourage you to continue writing poetry; you have talent!
2006-08-02 14:07:23 · answer #1 · answered by canary 5 · 3⤊ 1⤋
NO
http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index;_ylt=AkJeXKv2r5mz8O0VCTQ0WJHsy6IX?qid=20060801131314AA8lNfc
2006-08-02 20:55:36 · answer #2 · answered by NONAME 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Not quite sure what you are trying to convey or what the point is of this poem. It seems too full of blanks. Needs to have some direction.
2006-08-02 20:58:57 · answer #3 · answered by Twisted Maggie 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Wow. Conformist!
2006-08-02 20:58:25 · answer #4 · answered by ouoray 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
What kind of feedback do you want? Are you asking about the mood, the words, the lack of music, the style, the message?
2006-08-02 20:57:57 · answer #5 · answered by idiot detector 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
How could you let yourself mourn the spilling of emotions.
2006-08-02 20:56:57 · answer #6 · answered by RC 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Don't hang yourself from a chandellier because you caught your girlfriend in bed with your best friend. Insist it would be a threesome next time.
2006-08-02 21:12:59 · answer #7 · answered by lisa k 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Sucks.
2006-08-02 20:56:38 · answer #8 · answered by yo_momma_is_sweet 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
a bit on the darker side of things but very well written
2006-08-02 20:57:38 · answer #9 · answered by Angelina 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Your poetry is boring and non-imaginative. Wake up and enjoy life.
2006-08-02 20:56:19 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋