My lady's presence makes the roses red,
Because to see her lips they blush for shame.
The lily's leaves, for envy, pale became,
And her white hands in them this envy bred.
The marigold the leaves abroad doth spread,
Because the sun's and her power is the same.
The violet of purple colour came.
Dyed in the blood she made my heart to shed.
In brief: all flowers from her their virtue take;
From her sweet breath their sweet smells do proceed;
The living heat which her eyebeams doth make
Warmeth the ground and quickeneth the seed.
The rain, wherewith she watereth the flowers,
Falls from mine eyes, which she dissolves in showers.
2006-08-02 13:33:57 · 12 answers · asked by Anonymous in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
Umm, you must be 8 - 10 yrs old right?
2006-08-02 13:41:43 · answer #1 · answered by Just Me 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Whatever ratings you maybe getting for you poem, but as far i think, you had the guts to write out a poem for someone special and also had the real feelings to express it out through your own written poem (i hope its not stolen from anywhere)
You are madly in love with someone, i guarantee @};-
Wish you all the best for whatever crazy things you are gonna do for your love or in your life :))
2006-08-02 13:43:58 · answer #2 · answered by Skyn3t 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
sounds like your talking about Mother Nature as well..which is cool too..I like it but must critique it k?..
second line..instead of 'because' I'd use 'just'
watereth..not sure its a word but just put waters
wherewith..again strange wording..within or therefore
I think it is very good okay?good job!
2006-08-02 13:44:13 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Um.....I'm not gonna say it sucked....but it could use just a little work...keep trying tho....if u have a writer's soul then the words will flow from your pen like Mozart's symphonies
2006-08-02 13:45:00 · answer #4 · answered by badhair92 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
umm it sounded ok. it could be better cuz i diddn't understand some of the words you used. but other wise it was ok it is a work in progress! keep going with it don't give up!
2006-08-02 13:41:03 · answer #5 · answered by I Luv Joel Madden!! 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
im sure u put a lot of effort and time into this...but it sucks..sorry man
2006-08-02 15:29:17 · answer #6 · answered by r_thomas129 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
0., Poetry is teh ghey.
2006-08-02 13:37:27 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
yuk dont give up ur day job
2006-08-02 13:39:28 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
it is very good a ten
2006-08-02 13:44:50 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
it sucked... big time
uhh rating? -2345
2006-08-02 13:37:25 · answer #10 · answered by ♥michele♥ 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋