As the days pass, my love for you grows more and more everyday.
When your telling me that you love me,
I feel better for who I am because I got you everyday.
All my life was a disaster, but when you appear in my life,
my disaster turn into happiess because you appear.
I belive in you, your the light in my deepest, darkest hour,
your the key to my very soul,
you are my savior when I fall.
In your arms I found my paradise.
As 1000 years would past, I would fall in love with you again.
You are my only chance for happiness, if I lose you now I know I would die.
If I can't have you, I don't want nobody else baby girl, your more than a woman, more than a woman to me
I love you....
2006-08-01 10:40:32 · 14 answers · asked by ||| Romeo Boy ||| 4 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
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2006-08-01 11:26:22 · answer #1 · answered by Judas Rabbi 7 · 1⤊ 2⤋
5
2006-08-01 17:46:10 · answer #2 · answered by beezebee25 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
That's not bad, but try this...
My love for you grows with each passing day.
Your declaration of your love for me makes me want to be a better man.
You have turned my darkest days to light, my sorrows to joy and have touched my heart like no other.
With you I have found paradise, but without you paradise is lost.
A thousand eternities could pass and yet not tarnish my love.
You are my life, my love and the very soul of my existence.
For without you, my heart would not have found true happiness.
You are all the woman I need,...I love you.
It is basically what you have intended to say. Just thought I would help to clean it up for you. Feel free to use it as you wish. Good luck! BTW, I'd give you a six for the act of expression and sentiment alone. Keep it up and check your spelling, grammar and syntax and you'll really have something.
2006-08-01 18:03:23 · answer #3 · answered by The Good Humor Man 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I would certainly be honored to receive that poem from a guy, but, as for poetic quality, I would give it a 4. Being a poet myself, I must say that this would be better made as a paragraph-form statement than as a poem because this piece has more of a rhythm and would be more deeply emotional in paragraph form. It all has to do with the choice of words, and these words are more declarative than poetic (which is definitely not a bad thing: you don't have to write high-minded verse to say it well!).
2006-08-01 18:03:41 · answer #4 · answered by Aubri M 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
8 for yr couage to post the poem . 6 for the sentiment. 1 for sounding so desperate. 3 for the poem
2006-08-01 17:50:10 · answer #5 · answered by Lola j 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
very poor spelling and grammar. plus it sounds a bit like the kind of person who will threaten suicide if you want to break up. there are some nice phrases in it. my honest opinion: 2.
2006-08-01 17:47:05 · answer #6 · answered by hiddenhotty 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
nice but needs work, the sentiment is there, next time use the spell check
My rating: 4 stars
2006-08-01 17:51:19 · answer #7 · answered by MJ 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
-4
2006-08-01 17:48:32 · answer #8 · answered by keats27 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
1. . .
but for confession: 3
2006-08-01 17:46:52 · answer #9 · answered by Freeque 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's sweet i give it a 4.
2006-08-01 17:47:20 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋