You
You beauty captivates
with your style and fashion
and we our eyes meet
I'm filled with passion
Your in my thoughts
When we're apart
I always remember
Your gentle touch
When we love and laugh
I am filled with bliss
and long to taste
your tempting kiss
To hold and love you
I want so much
It keeps me longing
For us to touch
I would love to IM or get the e mail address of anyone who liked this.
2006-08-01 04:46:55 · 4 answers · asked by us1971guy 1 in Health ➔ Women's Health
Not bad for a first attempt. Keep going, keep a notebook of ideas and jottings...take a writing class and learn more, and write more. A class is good for constructive feedback but you don't have to take everything they tell you as the law. But listen to what the other students have to say...share ideas.
2006-08-01 05:04:20 · answer #1 · answered by anna 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Not bad, but youneed to work on your grammar.
You(r) beauty captivates
with your style and fashion
and we(when) our eyes meet
I'm filled with passion
Your(You're) in my thoughts
When we're apart
I always remember
Your gentle touch
When we love and laugh
I am filled with bliss
and long to taste
your tempting kiss
To hold and love you
I want so much
It keeps me longing
For us to touch
2006-08-01 11:54:05 · answer #2 · answered by Suspended Again! 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Hey post your stuff for the world!
2006-08-01 11:52:30 · answer #3 · answered by baxter_thornberry 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Sorry, poems only impress me when they are actually wrote for me, and not everyone who happens to read it.
2006-08-01 11:59:49 · answer #4 · answered by Tyla 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋